Talk:SMS Odin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 12:19, 1 May 2013 (UTC) I'll get on to this one shortly. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 12:19, 1 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	all points addressed
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	OK
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	OK
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	OK
	2c. it contains no original research.	OK
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	OK
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	OK
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	OK
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	OK
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	OK
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	OK
	7. Overall assessment.	points addressed

Comments

"amidships" is a duplicate link
no alt text for image (not required)
did she have a name when she was a merchant ship?
"where she served in the squadron"
" 240 mm (9.4 in) thick amidships"
what are "Marine type boilers" and should they be linked to an article?
"The lengthened hull~~, which~~ improved her hydrodynamic shape, and the improved boilers increased her speed by a full knot..."
this might be an Americanism, but should "through the end of the war" be "through to the end of the war"?
the "Fate" field in the infobox is formatted weirdly.

Short but sharp, given the lack of wartime action, but a pleasure to review. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 08:19, 2 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

- Should all be addressed, and per comments at the Ägir review. Thanks again. Parsecboy (talk) 18:38, 5 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - No worries, promoting. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 02:13, 6 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]