Talk:SMS Markgraf/GA1

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Reviewer: —Ed!^(talk) 23:19, 23 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"the Kaiser removed von Ingenohl from his post on 2 February." - who was he and what was his post? Introduce the name, rank and position here so it doesn't confuse the reader.
- Fixed. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Also, the name and position of the Kaiser should be introduced here for some context.
- Added. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Vice Admiral Scheer became Commander in chief..." - what was his first name?
- Added. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"...when Admiral von Pohl became too ill to continue in that post.[7]" - what sickness was he suffering from? This should be clarified.
- Added. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"At around 19:30, Jellicoe's main force of battleships entered the battle..." - same for him. Full name and rank is needed.
- Added. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"At 05:06, Markgraf and several other battleships fired on an imaginary submarine.[44]" - this doesn't sound very encyclopedic. Did they fire on something they thought was a submarine? What was it and why did they think it was a sub?
- Throughout the battle both sides repeatedly thought they saw submarines attacking and fired on them - a number of sources refer to them specifically as "imaginary submarines", including Tarrant and Campbell. As far as I know there's no explanation other than jumpy nerves. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"For most of 1917, Markgraf was occupied with guard duties in the North Sea, interrupted only by a refit period in January and periodic unit training in the Baltic.[4]" - what was refitted or improved during this action?
- Just periodic maintenance. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"their crews were reduced to 200 officers and men." - needs a rewording, it implies the officers are not men.
- Fixed. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
ISBNs need to be consistent, either all of them 13-digit or 10-digit.
- Books published before 2007 or so don't have 13-digit ISBNs, and people yell at FAC when you try to put a 13-digit on an edition that predates it. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The "Campbell" notes need to be clarified. Right now it's impossible to tell which ones refer to the 1998 book or the 1987 book.

GA is on hold pending a few changes. —Ed!^(talk) 23:44, 23 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

- Added the short title for Campbell's book. Parsecboy (talk) 02:47, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Very good. This article Passes GA now. Well done. —Ed!^(talk) 05:32, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]