Talk:SMS Csepel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 08:23, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:

the linking of k.u.k. Kriegsmarine and Austro-Hungarian Navy is a bit weird. I suggest linking Austro-Hungarian Navy to k.u.k. Kriegsmarine then just putting Austro-Hungarian Navy in plain text within parens immediately thereafter
- Umm, K.u.K. is linked to the German abbreviation, not the Navy, as I think that that needs its own link as explanation.
Ccentral Adriatic Sea, there is at least one other example
1st Battle of Durazzo is also a bit odd, usually this would be rendered as First Battle of Durazzo
maybe name and link the French sub in the lead?
- No, specific details are reserved for the main body.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:00, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
same as point one for Regia Marina (Royal Italian Navy)
I assume the main guns were behind gunshields? Perhaps add that they were in open mounts if that is correct?
suggest adding (modern day Kraljevica, Croatia) after Porto Ré, same for Cattaro (Kotor, Montenegro), Fiume (Rijeka, Croatia) and Pola (Pula, Croatia) later
"18 bodies from the war" water?
- D'oh!
suggest linking minefield to naval mine rather than the redir to landmine
- Actually, the DAB is a better link since it defines the common usage of minefield.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:00, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
suggest linking Kingdom of Italy
Nnorthern Adriatic
suggest "but in the darkness they were believed by the Italians to be friendly ships."
"The ship turned away" which ship?
"protected cruiser Italian cruiser Libia"→"Italian protected cruiser Libia"?
suggest "the derelict"→"the derelict ship"
link Pelagosa to Palagruža and state that they are islands
- Ummm, linked on first usage in the first para of the Action off Vieste section.
suggest linking Albania, Bulgaria, Serbia and Greece to the kingdoms (Principality of Albania for Albania) rather than the current countries
suggest linking Durrës for Durazzo and do the same as suggested above
link Brindisi
there is a second instance of the land mine redirect for minefield
"Habsburg ship" Habsburg assumes knowledge, perhaps just go with Austro-Hungarian? this occurs later as well
suggest "Csepel managed to rejoin Seitz's main body"

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:29, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

suggest "scout cruisers on the barrage"→"scout cruisers on the Otranto Barrage"
link or redlink Carlo Mirabello and Italian scout cruiser Aquila?
suggest "dropping around them around 09:05"→"dropping around them about 09:05"
the sentence beginning "After the Italian ships" needs a tweak
suggest "They were spotted by the pair of British destroyers, HMS Jackal and Hornet, which were patrolling the western side of the Strait. The British ships altered course to intercept them."
the new state could not have "publicly dethroned" Karl I, as it had no power to do that, perhaps "publicly repudiated"
link Italian front (World War I)
is there an OCLC for Marine—Gestern, Heute?
armored cruiser and captain are duplinked
the images all look fine.

That's all I have, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:16, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Wow, I'm usually much better at linking ships and places. Think that I've addressed all of these.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:00, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:57, 8 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]