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Reviewer: Protonk (talk · contribs) 14:19, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]


I figured I'd tackle this nomination as it was listed as a COI nom and who better to counteract that than an R user! :) This is a tough article to review, as we want to be careful about tone and neutrality but coverage of SAS is overwhelmingly positive. In general I don't feel tone is a serious problem with this article, although the history section reads as a chronologically ordered list of the awesome things SAS has done (many of which are repeated later in the Workplace section). I've found a few issues with sources (detailed below) and I have some comments about organization and structure but other than that this is a good effort and I don't think much work will be needed to promote the article.

Thanks so much! Yah, this will be the most positive GA article I have created, with Noodles & Company coming in as a close second, due to SAS' primary claim to notability being their status as a good corporate citizen. I've answered most of the easy ones below, but I'd like to cull the article myself top-down for source formatting, copyediting, etc. as I need to re-familiarize myself with the sources to better respond to the rest and fix a lot of minor citation formatting issues. CorporateM (Talk) 22:43, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
@CorporateM: Once the world programming bit is done the only outstanding issue is a discussion of the IPO. As I said below I'm willing to write up some suggested verbiage to see if it works for you, but I won't be able to do that until this evening. Once that is done or we agree otherwise on what's in the article I'm happy to pass this. Good work! Protonk (talk) 16:54, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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  • The lede should be updated to better summarize the contents of the article. It doesn't need to be exhaustive, but should cover at least when it was founded and some other pertinent details from the history (as they make up the bulk of the article)
 Done Protonk (talk) 16:51, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think pronunciation hints normally go earlier in the lede, e.g. "SAS Institute Inc (or SAS, pronounced "sass")" might work. At the very least "SAS" should be bolded and noted as an alternate name for the company since it is relatively common (and we'll use it later in the article)
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 21:40, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "SAS has been ranked in Fortune's annual best places to work..." in -> among
 Not done I think the current is correct actually. The noun of this sentence as-written is "the rankings" which SAS was "in" as oppose to "among". If the sentence were written differently "among" would be correct. CorporateM (Talk) 21:42, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
How about "SAS has been ranked among Fortune's "Best Companies to Work For" each year since the survey's inception in 1997" Avoids saying it's "ranked in the rankings" and uses Fortune's name for it. I'm on the fence about award/survey, since it appears the ranking is based on a survey and I'm not sure "award" is the most correct term. Thoughts on that? Tweaks? Protonk (talk) 22:24, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"SAS has been identified as a "Best Company to Work For" in Fortune's annual rankings each year since the list's inception in 1997"? CorporateM (Talk) 00:05, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Do it to it. :) Protonk (talk) 00:07, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 00:15, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "SAS introduced its first reseller program intended to expand implementations..." Why not just say "sales"?
 DoneCorporateM (Talk) 21:44, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "SAS spokespeople say its employee benefits are provided for business, not altruistic, reasons." You know what, plop a blockquote from Goodnight about this practice before this paragraph starts (if you want :) ). He's quoted widely--and consistently--enough among sources covering the perks that one might be worthwhile.
This is true; there are two quotes from Goodnight that are widely reported in the sources. One is about how 90% of his company's assets drive out the gate every day at 6 and he needs them to come back the next day, and there's another about this triangle of employees/customers/investors and how making employees makes all three happy (or something like that). Let me find one and use a Request Edit, as it is so rare that such a promotional quote is warranted, it would raise the appearance of COI. CorporateM (Talk) 21:48, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I think his views on the material reasons for wanting to pamper employees are pretty central to the coverage the company gets. I would like to see what the other folks watching this page say, but I think it's valuable. Protonk (talk) 21:58, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, also, CorporateM please ping me when you add that requested edit template because I'd like to leave a comment on the talk page proper. Protonk (talk) 00:12, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 00:36, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...cost the company $4.5 million USD, but save it an additional $4.5 million USD..." "additional" seems odd here. What savings is it being added to?
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 00:16, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A professor from Stanford estimated..." is this Jeffrey Pfeffer (named below in the Structure and culture section)?
 Done Yes, I had to find a different source with his full name. CorporateM (Talk) 21:54, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • We don't need SAS (software) in the see also section as we link it multiple times in the article.
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 21:55, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Consider wikilinking to concepts such as flat organization. In general the wikilinks in the article are to other businesses or publications. There's nothing wrong with that and the article isn't egregiously over or underlinked, but building the web is valuable.
 Done I found a few linking opportunities. I prefer to avoid over-linking though. CorporateM (Talk) 21:59, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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 Done is that better? CorporateM (Talk) 23:28, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. Protonk (talk) 00:09, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Many of the employee perks the company later became known for, such as fresh fruit, reasonable work hours..." this feels a little booster-ish
 Done Better? I removed "later became known for" which I don't think is in the source anyway. CorporateM (Talk) 23:29, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. Protonk (talk) 00:09, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In the 1970s, the company established its first marketing department..." I presume we're avoiding specificity because the source does so, but this seems like it should be constrained between 1976 and 1979.
How about "late 1970s"? CorporateM (Talk) 22:37, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Works for me. Protonk (talk) 22:38, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 23:30, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • How many founders did SAS have? which sold their interests?
Four founders, two remain. I do remember seeing somewhere that one of them sold out for $200k or so early on. I'll see what I can find. CorporateM (Talk) 00:17, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Currently we have "and some of the founders sold their interest in the company". I suggest we move this to the second paragraph and say "Barr and Helwig later sold their interests in the company" to make it more clear? The source does not say the exact year that Helwig sold. CorporateM (Talk) 00:47, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
That's better and resolves my followup question about the implicit connection between getting a marketing department and having founders leave. Protonk (talk) 01:00, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done No connection between the marketing department and some of the founders selling their shares. CorporateM (Talk) 02:12, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • the first paragraph in the history section is a bit confusing to parse. What, exactly was the original project at NC state? When was the project started? The third sentence jumps in "By 1976 the software had 100 customers" What software?
 Done better? CorporateM (Talk) 02:17, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. Protonk (talk) 02:33, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I know this was raised on the talk page, but I'm not sure it's important to mention that SAS owns aircraft. Is there a secondary source which takes note of this?
 Not done Because there is at least one editor that disagrees with removing it, it is a "controversial edit" and I cannot remove myself per WP:COI. Please remove it if you are comfortable doing so. On the other hand, I'm not sure I should do another Request Edit on the same topic, after the original didn't go my way, which would seem like gaming (but really, yah, it should be taken out). CorporateM (Talk) 03:48, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I'll remove it with a note. Protonk (talk) 15:48, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
If it's replaced that shouldn't impact the review, so either way this is  Done} Protonk (talk) 17:00, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why not just note that it had been on Inc Magazine's list of fast growing companies for six years between 1979 and 1985?
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 03:04, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Its revenues come relatively evenly from Europe, Africa, the Middle East and the Americas." This was true in 2010. Is it true now?
The latest stats appear to be: 11.9 percent Asia-Pacific, 41.4 percent Europe, Middle East and Africa America and 46.7 percent Americas. Should we replace it with a more up-to-date primary source? Press release = eww, but it might be ok for revenues. CorporateM (Talk) 03:54, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
My recommendation is to move from the general to the specific. I'd keep the source noting broad distribution and then make a follow on sentence noting exact distribution in 2014. Protonk (talk) 15:48, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 19:15, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Does the bit about Curriculum Pathways belong in the corporate culture? It's in a paragraph which discusses employee volunteering and I think could be better placed elsewhere.
The two sentences are in the same paragraph because they are both about charity. Donating software and donating employee time. CorporateM (Talk) 03:56, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Employees are encouraged to work reasonable hours..." We have a source that notes most of the employees work ~35 hours a week and that programmer style binge sessions are discouraged. I don't have a problem noting the encouragement but I feel we can give a little more context to the claim by separating this from the fitness center clause and noting the observed work hours.
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 04:00, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Keep an eye out for close paraphrasing of the cnn article. I don't see phrases lifted but I do see claims made in quick succession from the same place (e.g. stay-at-home mom -> fitness center, both appear in the same paragraph in the same order from the same source).
This one? CorporateM (Talk) 00:19, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. I thought about refactoring this point because I don't think close paraphrasing is a problem, but it did seem worth offering a warning. Feel free to treat this as informational. Protonk (talk) 00:59, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, the URL seems to going on and off. As soon as it's working again I'll take a look. CorporateM (Talk) 02:17, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Not done Argh. The link was working for a moment, but is down again. The article is not available through my library's online archives. If it's not something that's going to prevent it from hitting GA, I think we just let this one go. I have no method of getting to the source material unless the website goes back up. CorporateM (Talk) 21:32, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • What is the SAS certification program and why is it important to the history of the company?
There is something like 35,000 or so certifications and numerous books published to prepare candidates for certification. It's not a very exciting topic that I would expect to get media coverage, but I would think any enterprise software page should have a sentence or two, the same way we include revenues and offices by de-facto. Let me see if I can find better/more sources. CorporateM (Talk) 21:36, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I think you resolved this by moving it out of the history section (which I agree with).  Done Protonk (talk) 22:34, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • What information do we have on SAS publishing beyond a local newspaper in 2000? Does it still exist? What kind of books do they publish?
Yup, still in operation and doing the same type of thing (publishing SAS-related books/documentation). I added another source. CorporateM (Talk) 21:29, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good. Protonk (talk) 22:27, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • The User community section is largely about SAS certification and SAS publishing. I think one may think the latter is germane because it publishes books by SAS users except it's likely trivially true that a book on SAS will be written by a SAS user. :)
According to the 20-page Stanford case study I'm reading from Jeff Pfeffer, the publishing of books written by users is unique: "In addition to publishing and selling its own users’ manuals and guides, the company publishes books on using SAS written by users who aren’t SAS Institute employees, an approach to being a publisher that is relatively unique in the software industry." CorporateM (Talk) 20:33, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I think that may be a function of owning an imprint, as (just looking at some other statistical software vendors) Maple & the R foundation don't publish the books about their language but the authors are necessarily users. State does appear to publish books in much the same manner as SAS. However if you're working from the case study I'm ok with sourcing that claim to Pfeffer (though I'm not sure it's as unique as he claims). Protonk (talk) 20:40, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Sometimes with really positive or negative articles, the sources are written by enthusiasts or critics that can get carried away. I think it is best to include it, but without adding the commentary about how unique it is, which is a really bold claim that would require particularly exceptional sources. Especially if original research seems to put the claim in doubt. CorporateM (Talk) 21:31, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "SAS became known as a good place to work..." I'm not sure this clause is necessary. The following claim noting specific recognition by various magazines is more clear.
Hrm, I think the first sentence helps provide context for the following statement about the rankings. If you feel strongly you should remove it though. CorporateM (Talk) 03:01, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I know there was some discussion on the talk page about knocking down the size of the Software section, but I think it can be expanded somewhat. e.g. there's no mention of JMP (which is a rather large interest for SAS, especially in BI). It doesn't need to be 5 paragraphs or anything, but I think some more context can be given to the reader.
 Done How's that? I just added JMP and some content about their business model. The reason this section is a bit short is because there is a separate article on the software at SAS (software). CorporateM (Talk) 21:16, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I'd remove the bit about JMP graph builder (but that's just my opinion). Also the ref you had for JMP genomics was never added, just the name. It was causing reference errors so I replaced it with a {{cn}} tag. Otherwise it's an improvement. Protonk (talk) 22:27, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there any other info on the education division aside from that AP article?
  • the operations section is mainly about SAS's R&D budget. We could move the reseller program information to operations and split out R&D into a distinct paragraph. that way we have a bit on R&D (Which is important to the company and noted by many sources) and sales/ops/etc. in another paragraph.
I disagree. it looks like it only has two sentences about R&D and it makes sense in that paragraph about operations and revenues, since it discusses R&D as a percent of revenue. CorporateM (Talk) 21:29, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I'll take another look. Protonk (talk) 22:27, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I think I figured out why this was bothering me. We have "In 1994, Computerworld found that out of the world's 50 largest software companies, SAS had the highest ratio of R&D spending as a percent of revenue and 2.5 times the industry average." which is true but it follows a general statement where we report that SAS has the highest R&D ratio already. Try just reporting that they were 2.5 times the industry average in that sentence and see how it reads (noting the year and the source). I think you'll be happy with it. Protonk (talk) 03:52, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 13:38, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good. Protonk (talk) 14:59, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • SAS Institute Inc. v World Programming Ltd should probably be noted in the body of the article, though it is in a see also section. I can't see it meriting more than a couple of sentences, but I think it's closely related enough to be included.
To provide some context, the reason it's not here is because it's already covered at SAS (software), which is duplicated here using Summary style. (the lawsuit is not in the Lead of the software page, so it didn't get carried over). It is also a corporate issue, so we could just copy/paste the paragraph on the lawsuit here, but then it would be on three Wikipedia pages redundantly. Not sure what to do about it. CorporateM (Talk) 22:04, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I'll see if I can write some copy. In the meantime just ignore it. :) Protonk (talk) 22:09, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
@CorporateM: See here for a first crack. It's short and to the point. I'm surprised there isn't more coverage of the subject because it's a pretty important case in terms of software copyright, but so it goes... Protonk (talk) 14:23, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I added a period and changed "argued" to "alleged". Did you want to keep it in all three places then? (the software page, corporate page, and a dedicated page). CorporateM (Talk) 14:47, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I'm ok with the information being in multiple places so long as each (or for our concerns just the one here) are appropriate for the context. Here a short note in the company's history seems fine to me (plus it lets us get rid of the see also section). Protonk (talk) 14:51, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
KK. CorporateM (Talk) 15:09, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think the article could do with a little more detail on the IPO consideration. We have one sentence on it (and source--for a different claim--a US Today article which talks mainly about the process). (also we cite an AP wire story about their growth when the story is mainly about the mooted IPO)
I think the reason I didn't include more about the potential IPO from USA Today is due to Crystal Ball. Most of the content is very speculative regarding whether their staying private saved the corporate culture and it's not based on a professional analysis, such as recommended in an essay I wrote at WP:ORGSPECULATION. However if we want to add more, I'd go with something like "According to USA Today, there was a lot of pressure to go public, but by staying private James Goodnight saved the company's workplace environment from pressure from investors." CorporateM (Talk) 03:18, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I'd say there's more than enough commentary on the run up to the IPO (both contemporary rumors and retrospective analysis from Goodnight and third parties) to justify it. You're probably more familiar w/ the sources than I am but if you'd like I can pluck out which ones I feel can be summarised for the article. Protonk (talk) 15:48, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
If you want to add that, I'd be ok with it provided the last clause is refactored a bit to avoid "saved the company's workplace culture". Paradoxically, I think a longer note can include such motivations (again, I'll have to re-read the sources to flesh that out), but in a single sentence it's tough to assert that even passing off the claim to USA Today. Would you like me to try and write up a blurb a la the World Programming lawsuit? Protonk (talk) 14:59, 23 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "The Associated Press reported that analysts attributed the growth to aggressive R&D spending" I don't see this claim in the cited source. Specifically I don't see the atribution to analysts.
 Done I corrected the citation, though I can't find the AP article it is cited to online, it was available through ProQuest through NC State library resources. The exact text of the source is "Industry analysts say a steady emphasis on research and development has helped push SAS into the major leagues of software makers." CorporateM (Talk) 03:36, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not sure this is the best link we can send readers to. Further, it looks like the source we claim to cite is listed in the "further reading" on that page.
 Not done I've used the International Directory of Company Histories on quite a few articles - unfortunately Funding Universe is the only place I've found online that provides the full text. Otherwise we have to force readers to go to their library to verify the source-text. CorporateM (Talk) 22:28, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
That's up to you, and so long as it's a reliable (in the colloquial sense) reprint of the original it's not a GA issue (i.e. I can't force you to prefer one version of a source over another). Protonk (talk) 22:31, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I think there a way to provide two URLs. [1] CorporateM (Talk) 23:32, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Nevermind, I just took it out when I realized the source you were referring to was not the international directory, but the original source in Business Leaders (I actually obtained the original source material when I wrote the article). I just took out the link. There is no online anything available - I had to get a paper copy from the library. CorporateM (Talk) 02:18, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "SAS Publishing was created in 2000 as a separate entity that works to make SAS-related books more accessible." cited source says "availability" which is different enough from accessible to cause me to raise an eyebrow.
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 03:39, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is this a reliable source? Also take a look at finding a better permanent URL, the one we have looks like it was kicked out by a broken CMS (though it does work)
 Done No it's not reliable at all. It was written by a "contributor" who upon further research was a student. I took it out CorporateM (Talk) 22:24, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done CorporateM (Talk) 22:22, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "SAS also provides employees with life counseling services for things like picking a college for their children, elderly care..." The CBS news article doesn't mention adoption, divorce, etc. so the placement of that citation is appropriate. Where's our source for the remainder?
 Not done The rest: "adoption, divorce, or raising kids" is cited to the Fortune article at the end of the following sentence. CorporateM (Talk) 22:13, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
rgr that. Protonk (talk) 22:15, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is this our source for the SAS certification program?
I think it was just to confirm the year the certification program started. There are quite a few books about SAS certification[2], but none of them gave a start-date. Let me see if I can find a better source. CorporateM (Talk) 03:45, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
If you want to use a primary source to note the start of the program and add a secondary source to discuss details I'd support that. If that's an edit you aren't comfortable making you can note the text you think works best and I'll insert it if I agree. Protonk (talk) 17:04, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Question: There are a lot of books published by SAS Books, but authored by independent consultants/experts. Do you think such a book is reliable? For example, this author looks reliable to me, if there were anything usable in his book, even if SAS Books made it easier for his book to get published and disseminated. CorporateM (Talk) 19:21, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Done I found a secondary source in a trade magazine. CorporateM (Talk) 19:27, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Can we find the original article written by the "Stanford professor" which Goodnight cites in this interview? Maybe it's the fast company article that 404'd but I suspect some version of it would be in a business/management journal.
This looks like the original. I'll buy a copy here and see about adding it. CorporateM (Talk) 22:18, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
 Not done That was a bust. $10 and 20 pages later, and that doesn't appear to be the right paper. There are plenty of secondary sources that mention it though and finding the original primary source probably isn't necessary. CorporateM (Talk) 20:58, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Ok. I'm not a fan of "member of congress citations" (e.g. where we say "A professor from Stanford..." or "A paper from MIT..."), but i think you've gone above and beyond in trying to improve the ref. Hopefully we can leave the name and affiliation and someone will happen upon the paper eventually. Protonk (talk) 21:10, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Feel free to reply inline. I'll watch this review and I'm happy to discuss points that I've made should you feel that the article doesn't need changing or I've made an error. Thanks. Protonk (talk) 17:26, 21 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]