Talk:São Tomé and Príncipe at the 2016 Summer Olympics/GA1

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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 17:12, 9 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

We should have that initial mention of Brazil wikilinked

Are you sure? I don't usually link countries per WP:OLINK. Dat Guy^Talk_Contribs 18:34, 31 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Three athletes from São Tomé and Princípe were selected for the Games, competing only in both track and field and canoeing. " This is awkwardly phrased; maybe try "two in athletics, and one in canoeing"
"Among them were distance runners Romário Leitão and Celma Bonfim da Graça, the lone female of the roster and returning Olympian from Beijing 2008, and flatwater canoeist Buly Triste,..." And then maybe incorporate this into the reformed prior sentence. Just is arranged awkwardly

Tried something with the last two. How does it flow?

"São Tomé and Princípe, however, has yet to win its first Olympic medal." The inclusion of "however" tends to much toward commentary

Removed.

"Both athletics São Toméan participants competed at the Games through universality slots while Buly Triste qualified via the 2016 African Sprint Qualifier in Pretoria, South Africa." This should start a new paragraph, one for the Olympic background and one for the 2016 Olympic background

Done.

The sections about the athletes themselves are fine, but you might consider adding a picture beyond the Sao Tomean flag. Maybe a picture of one of the venues?

Added one.

Solid little article, should be ready soon...QatarStarsLeague (talk) 17:12, 9 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@QatarStarsLeague: I believe I've done the fixes. Dat Guy^Talk_Contribs 18:34, 31 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]