Talk:Ryan Lavarnway/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 15:40, 29 June 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

1. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall: Pass

   Pass/Fail:

Review

Lead

• It jumps from team to team (ie. During the season, he played in the Oakland Athletics organization, playing six games in the major leagues for them. He was a 2018 mid-season Triple-A All Star for the Nashville Sounds.). Can you make it a smoother transition?

Early life

• Please add a reference for his birthday
  • You may want to check out this reference [1]
• Reference #3 doesn't state Lavarnway was born in Burbank, California, and grew up in Woodland Hills, California + the other refs are dead (see section title "References")
  • His MLB profile says Woodland Hills [2]
    • Most of the sources state Lavarnway was born in Burbank, then moved to Woodland Hills - I'm going to assume MLB.com is mistaken. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:50, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
• Please move Ref 4 to the end of the sentence From watching his father play softball games, Lavarnway developed an interest in baseball at a young age. Then Ref 6 can go after He played catcher in Little League, and Ref 4 after his favorite major league player growing up was Jason Varitek.
  • I've changed up the refs; the ones provided now validate both sentences. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:50, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
• Why are 4 references needed to prove At El Camino Real High School, Lavarnway caught as a junior but played outfield for the "Conquistadors" baseball team as a senior?
  • 3/4 are dead and the one useable reference doesn't state what year he played outfield in.
    • Down to 1, and text changed to reflect only what it says. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:52, 2 July 2020 (UTC)

College career

• Why are 3 references needed for Lavarnway attended Yale University, where he majored in philosophy and played baseball for the Yale Bulldogs in the Ivy League?
• You can remove he said.
• For the Ivy Player and Rookie of the Week honor, you can use your reference from the JPOST that's already used in the article.
• Please expand on his rookie year
• Reference 13 + 15 doesn't state In 2007, Lavarnway moved back to catcher
• Since his Yale Bulldogs profile is dead, you need a new reference for his accomplishments
• Reference 17 +18 doesn't prove the sentence it's supposed to support
• Are 3 references needed to prove He missed the last 11 games of the year after breaking the scaphoid bone in his left wrist while diving into home plate in April?
• Reference 14 doesn't prove the sentence it's supposed to support

Career

Boston Red Sox

• Reference doesn't say 6th round
• Neither reference proves He signed for a $325,000 signing bonus
  • Use this reference
• Are 5 references necessary?
• Can you WL optioned to Major League Baseball transactions#Options?
• Reference 57 + 64 have a different title
• Are four references needed to prove He had surgery to remove the hamate bone from his left wrist at the Cleveland Clinic on June 4 and began a rehab assignment with Portland on July 21?
• Reference 66 needs an author

Baltimore Orioles

• Reference 69 needs the author (Tim Britton)
• Reference 70 needs the author (Bill Plunkett)
• Reference 78 needs access-date
• camdenchat is not a reliable source

Miami Marlins

• Please expand on the season. If it stopped due to COVID, please state his stats at the time of the pause in play.
  • The season never even started in the first place - nothing to write about yet. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:30, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
• Marlins' Ryan Lavarnway: Invited to summer camp

Dead references

• Ref #1 is dead. If it is the same ref as this one, it can probably be deleted. It is still available here
• Ref #2 is dead. It is still available here
• Ref #7, 8, 10 are dead.
• Ref #11 is dead. It is still available here
• Reference 16 is dead. It is still available here
• Reference 23 + 24 are dead
• Reference 33 – 35 are dead
• Reference 37 is dead
• Reference 39 + 40 are dead
• Reference 42 is dead
• Reference 46 is dead
• Reference 52 is dead but you can use this one or this one
• Reference 60 is dead
• Reference 72 is dead
• Reference 79 is dead
• Reference 82 is dead
  • Numbers have changed a bit now, but I believe I have all these corrected or deleted. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:42, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
    • Sanfranciscogiants17, thanks for the fixes. Passing now. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:19, 3 July 2020 (UTC)