Talk:Runaway (Janet Jackson song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:56, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Infobox looks good!
"made available commercially as the album's" → "made available commercially as the"
""Runaway" is a" → "it is a"
"in its composition." → "in the composition."
"The track received positive reviews" → "The song received positive reviews"
Only keep the Prince comparisons since no more than one review mentions the Supremes
"as well as with Jackson's" → "as well as with Janet Jackson's" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
"In the United States, it reached" → "In the US, it reached" per MOS:US
"An accompanying music video for the track was" → "An accompanying music video was", as this is implied
"most recently on second leg of the" → "most recently on the second leg of her"

Img looks good!
Mention that Design of a Decade was released in 1995
"as well two new tracks," → "as well as two new tracks,"
"the past 10 years."" → "the past 10 years"." per MOS:QUOTE
"duet with Jackson's brother" → "duet with Janet's brother" per MOS:SAMESURNAME, even though everyone knows who the second Jackson is anyway!
"of her past single" → "of Janet Jackson's past single" per above
"Deep Dish and Farley and Heller," → "Deep Dish, and Farley and Heller,"

"Jam and Lewis also play" this sentence needs past/present tense throughout to be consistent
Audio sample looks good!
"Musically, it is a" → "Musically, "Runaway" is a"
"sitars" as well as Jackson's" → "sitars", and Jackson's"
MOS:QUOTE issues throughout this section, i.e when there is punctuation inside speech marks and it is not a full sentence
"he also said that" → "he also said"
A misspelling is for cleveriy; check the source for this and if not use [] or [sic] to edit
"Freaky Trigger website observed that "this" → "Freaky Trigger website observed, "This" per this being a full sentence
"Australia and Mexico, while" → "Australia, and Mexico, while"
"she tries to convince him" → "Jackson tries to convince him"
"with the lyric," → "with the line,"
"Jam commented that the lyrics" change simply to the line if it is about this one line

"received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
"classified it as" → "handed the classification of"
MOS:QUOTE issues again in this section
"reworking of 'Escapade,'," why is there two commas when this is inside a quote?
Howard Cohen of The Miami Herald had" → "Howard Cohen of the Miami Herald had" with the wikilink
Remove repeated link to Michael Jackson
"Tirzah Agassi of Jerusalem Post wrote" → "Tirzah Agassi of The Jerusalem Post wrote" with the wikilink
"was "an innocuous trifle" → "is "an innocuous trifle"
"Paul Marsh from The San Francisco Examiner" → "Paul Marsh from the San Francisco Examiner" with the wikilink
"complementing that "if they were" → "complementing how "if they were"
"For Mark Brown from the Orange County Register," → "For Mark Brown from The Orange County Register," with the wikilink
"Andrew Hirst of" → "Andrew Hirst of the"

Img looks good!
"In the United States, "Runaway"" → "In the US, "Runaway""
"of the chart twice" → "of the Hot 100 twice"
Mention the certification was in the US
"of the single" remove this part and instead mention in this sentence the certification was in Australia
For the other parts of Europe, why is it disordered in terms of positions from highest to lowest or the opposite?

Img looks good!
"The accompanying music video for "Runaway" was" → "The music video for "Runaway" was"
Pipe Van Nuys, California to Van Nuys
"on August 29, 1995 through" → "on August 29, 1995, through"
Pipe Seven Wonders of the World to Wonders of the World
"her dress and jewelry" remove in the video because this is implied
"in New York City." → "in New York City (NYC)." per this city being mentioned twice
Pipe Pyramids of Egypt to Egyptian pyramids
"in Rio de Janeiro, as well as the" → "in Rio de Janeiro, and the"
"classic Hollywood musicals."" → "classic Hollywood musicals"." per MOS:QUOTE
"Los Angeles Times' Lorraine Ali commented" → "The Los Angeles Times' Lorraine Ali commented"

Img looks good!
"on the setlist of her" → "on the setlist of Jackson's"
Start a new sentence at during the performance to avoid a run-on
"blow-up props", with the singer dressed" → "blow-up props" and the singer dressed"
Lowercase the Roots per MOS:THEMUSIC

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Copyvio score looks great at 24.8%!!
Add via Google Books to any of the refs citing it, only wikilinking on the first instance
Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 4
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 6
The Miami Herald → Miami Herald on ref 19 with the wikilink
WP:OVERLINK of Music Week on ref 31
WP:OVERLINK of David Browne on ref 32
The San Francisco Examiner → San Francisco Examiner on ref 35 with the wikilink
The La Crosse Tribune → La Crosse Tribune on ref 36 with the wikilink
WP:OVERLINK of Music & Media on ref 86

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; took a couple of days for this! --K. Peake 10:56, 3 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake I think all of the issues have been addressed, thanks for your time reviewing this! Alex ^{reach me!} 16:40, 4 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

11JORN This is almost there now, you just still need to fix MOS:QUOTE issues, such as "soon overtakes the mix."" --K. Peake 20:11, 4 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake I honestly get so confused about quotes, but I tried my best now. Alex ^{reach me!} 22:11, 4 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

11JORN ✓ Pass now, there were some MOS:QUOTE issues left but I fixed them and see the edit to understand more! --K. Peake 07:38, 5 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]