Talk:Royal Sardinian Navy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk · contribs) 04:31, 28 July 2019 (UTC)

Comments

This is a topic I know virtually noting about, so I found this article an interesting read. I have the following comments:

• "The fleet was created in 1720 when the Duke of Savoy, Victor Amadeus II, became the King of Sardinia, though Victor Amadeus acquired the vessels be used to establish the fleet while he was still the King of Sicily in 1713" - this seems to be trying to squish two different topics in one sentence. Splitting it into two sentences should help a lot.
  • Good idea
• "resulting in the creation of the Regia Marina (Royal Navy)" - perhaps note that this makes the RSN the direct descendant of the modern Italian Navy?
  • Good idea
• "He created a marine corps" - I'd suggest linking this to Marines
  • Done
• "the small Sardinian fleet of galleys was placed under the command of the British Mediterranean Fleet. The small vessels" - using "small" in different ways here is a little bit confusing. I'd suggest tweaking to diversify the wording.
  • Changed the second one to "shallow-draft", which is more specific anyway
• It might be worth noting why this fleet was always small: it was the fleet of a small and not particularly rich country.
  • Have added a bit on this. Thanks for reviewing the article, Nick. Parsecboy (talk) 12:42, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
    • @Parsecboy: Sorry, I thought that I'd passed this nomination, but I'd forgotten to do so... My comments are now addressed - great work Nick-D (talk) 08:25, 8 August 2019 (UTC)
      • No problem, thanks again Nick. Parsecboy (talk) 10:05, 8 August 2019 (UTC)

Assessment

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