Talk:Rose Tyler/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 11:44, 23 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

General

No problems with imaging.
No concerns about the reliability of sources.
No dab links.
One dead link.

Updated to the 2008 version of the BBC website

All BBC News/Newsround refs should be formatted like how Ref 99 is, per consistency.

Fixed.

The em dash has been used incorrectly throughout the article. Per WP:DASH, do not use spaced em dashes, use it unspaced however: Another "planet" was detected—but it was later found to be a moon of Saturn.
Have added 'citation needed' tags for questionable quotes/statements.

replaced with references.

For Ref 84, Organgrider is not the work, and nor is The Guardian, it's guardian.co.uk.

Changed.

Ref 94 was also published on guardian.co.uk, not The Guardian, which refers to the newspaper.

Changed.

Ref 50's author is Sally Kinnes, not Russell T Davies.

Fixed.

Appearances

"Here, she is saved" ? Perhaps "There, she is saved"?
Replace comma in "Rose learns the importance of not tampering with history, when she attempts..." with em or en dash depending on your preference.
"...come to understand the meaning of this phrase when they come face to face with an unstoppable...", come is a tad repetitive here, perhaps you could rephrase it.
"and becomes suffused" ? "becoming suffused"
"to lead herself to this moment" ? "leading herself to the moment"
"After defeating a werewolf they are" comma between 'warewolf' and 'they'.
"...whilst setting up the Torchwood Institute which aims...", place comma between 'Institute' and 'which'
alternate-universe should not be hypenated

Fixed all of these.

Development

"Following "Doomsday" Piper...", comma before Piper
"In the first series finale Rose" comma before Rose
rewatched does not need to be hypenated
should it be humanise per British spelling?

Fixed all of these concerns.

Reception

"She was listed as the second-best female companion behind Sarah Jane Smith by The Daily Telegraph's Gavin Fuller, and the second-best companion behind Sarah Jane by Daniel Martin of The Guardian in 2007" could be easily changed to → "She was listed as the second-best female companion behind Sarah Jane Smith by The Daily Telegraph's Gavin Fuller and Daniel Martin of The Guardian in 2007", to get straight to the point.
redacted the sentence a bit.

Otherwise, a neat article (haven't watched Doctor Who in a while but never missed an episode during the Eccleston and Tennant era) and would be happy to pass provided changes are made. On hold for seven days. Lemonade51 (talk) 12:29, 23 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I think I've taken care of everything raised. Thank you very much for the constructive review. Let me know if there's anything outstanding or that can still be improved.Eshlare (talk) 15:17, 23 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]