Talk:Rosalie Edge/GA1

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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 23:39, 5 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 23:39, 5 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Image is appropriately tagged; sources are reliable.

"The youngest of the five surviving children, she was nicknamed": suggest "Mabel was nicknamed", since we've just been speaking about her mother.
- Changed as suggested. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 01:33, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"They married on 28 May": of which year?
- Added year. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 01:33, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"brought a rift between her and her husband": suggest "created a rift".
- Changed as suggested. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 01:33, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
There are uncited sentences at the start of the "Emergency Conservation Comittee" section.
- All now cited or trimmed. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:09, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"As a full-time volunteer environmental activist, she also asserted that it was every person's civic duty to protect nature, and she worked through the legislative process to achieve this." I don't follow the internal logic here. Why would her assertion depend on her volunteer activist status? And as written it seems as though the "this" at the end of the sentence refers to "every person's civic duty"; I think it's probably intended to refer to protecting nature.
- Reworded to match the (newly added) citation and moved to a different, more relevant section. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:09, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1931, Edge had filed a suit against the NAAS to obtain its membership mailing list": why "had"?
- Removed. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs)
There are uncited sentences in the last paragraph of "Conflict with the Audubon Society".
- All now cited. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:09, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
There's an uncited sentence at the end of "Hawk Mountain Sanctuary".
- Citation added, and the number fixed to match the citation. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:09, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"the 30 years when she dominated the conservation movement": is this neutral? Sounds like she was an outsider part of that time; influential, perhaps, and ultimately successful, but not always the dominant figure.
- Great point. I agree that it's non-neutral/inaccurate, and I've changed it from "dominated" to "was active in". I think this works as a short-term fix. In the long term, there are some powerful praise phrases present in the sources that might be worth summarizing with attribution. For now, Van Name's "indomitable hellcat" is at least exposing readers to that point of view. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:15, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 00:12, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Mike Christie, and thanks for reviewing the article! I'll get started on responding to your feedback right away. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 00:50, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I fixed all the easy ones. Five issues remaining. Hunting down some citations as I post this. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 01:33, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

All the missing citations are resolved. Here's a diff of those changes for easy review. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:09, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

All issues above now resolved, Mike Christie. Thanks again, and please let me know if more improvements need to be made to address the existing, or any new, concerns. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:15, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The fixes all look good. I see that the edits lost the point about " a dramatic shift from the standard thinking and practice in conservation of only preserving species that had a quantifiable economic value"; I found that an interesting point, but since it was uncited I've no idea if it was true or how relevant it is to Edge. I'm going to go ahead and pass this, as it's definitely GA quality, and if that point is relevant I trust you to readd it at sooner or later. Interesting article, and she sounds like a remarkable person. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 03:37, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I couldn't find that exact point and don't remember reading anything quite like it. It seems untrue, as much of conservation at the time was focused on species like songbirds with no direct economic value. I did find some stuff on the transformative influence of her (and the ECC's view) that I'll be adding shortly. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:48, 6 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]