Talk:Ronald Hugh Barker/GA1
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Reviewer: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 17:40, 18 July 2023 (UTC)
This is a WP:QUICKFAIL based on criterion 1 (It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria
) and 3 (It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include {{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags (See also {{QF}})
). Specifically, it fails WP:GACR 1a (the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct
), 1b (it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch [...]
), and 2b (reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose)
), and needs the corresponding maintenance tags. I'll list some of the specific issues I noted while reading through the article:
- Generally, the article needs a thorough copyediting. I strongly suggest reaching out to the WP:Guild of Copy Editors.
Barker excelled in mathematics, becoming keen on electronics. He is best known for his ground-breaking work
– "excelled" and "keen on" are a bit informal, and "ground-breaking" is a MOS:Word to watch.Born in Dublin to English parents his early education years were disrupted by his father's frequent periods of unemployment and moves between Dublin and England to find work as an artist and stained glass window designeroften staying in grim lodgings.
– run-on sentence.His father died when he was aged 14 of pneumonia.
– presumably the father was not 14 when he died, and the placement of "of pneumonia" is odd.Barker passed away peacefully on 7 October 2015.
– unsourced.passed away
– WP:EUPHEMISM.By using a prearranged pattern of bits (Barker code) the receiver can correctly synchronise the data with a very low probability of error. The code (which now has many variants) is used in most forms of data transmissions within (and out of) our world today.
– unsourced.Roy cycled back to Heath and Reach where he met his wife to be, Wendy Emily Hunt (1917–1998). Barker resigned from STC, as he felt his work on X-ray tubes was unrelated to the war effort.
– unsourced.During the years 1045 - 1947
– I'm guessing that's meant to be 1945–1947.During the years 1045 - 1947 he was responsible for devising, developing and seeing into production the first system of telemetry for guided weapons. In 1946 R H Barker read a paper describing his guidance system at an international conference on telemetry at Princeton University,US.
– unsourced.- There is a stray period at the beginning of the "Post-war career" section, and a stray paragraph break in the middle of (what's intended to be) the first paragraph.
Information about SRDE's history is held locally at The Red House Museum and Gardens, Christchurch, England. In 1976 the Signals Research and Development Establishment involved in communications research, joined Royal Radar Establishment to form the Royal Signals and Radar Establishment (RSRE). The National Archives (United Kingdom) now hold archived documents from SRDE Christchurch. These may not have been digitised.
– unsourced.The headquarters work was tedious and in 1957 Barker returned to SRDE Christchurch, Dorset, as Superintendent of Research in charge of the site.
– unsourced.Barker became a member of the council and served on the important Membership Committee for many years. On 6 March 1962 Barker elected a Fellow of the Institute of Physics and of the Institution of Mechanical Engineers. He served for a time on the Automatic Control committee of the latter.
– unsourced.as at the time there was conjecture as to how it worked. Perhaps this was something being researched or just for a bit of fun. After the company was taken over by the Rank Organisation in 1964 he became unhappy with the changes made to the way the company was run. He had no say in this and it soon became apparent that the opportunities for any interesting research were not going to be forthcoming and the future looked uninviting.
– unsourced.Here, Barker having had line management experience in industry now had a much greater level of responsibility. In 1965, there were 2,500 staff at RARDE and Barker was responsible for half the scientific branches and staff. The research work being undertaken was assessment of non-nuclear weapons systems. Barker retired in May 1979.
– unsourced.Applications of this are huge
– inappropriately informal.
I'll add some maintenance tags to the article itself. TompaDompa (talk) 17:40, 18 July 2023 (UTC)