Talk:Romanos III Argyros/GA1

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Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) 16:07, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will start this in a day or two auntieruth (talk) 16:07, 14 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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what does this mean....despite their being Byzantine vassals... That they were on the Byzantine's side. Changed.
Note 1 is confusing. Hippodrome is a court. What does it have to do with horse racing? A hippodrome is an English word for a horse racing course. See Wiktionary. See also Hippodrome of Constantinople. This being so it seemed worth footnoting that being a Judge of the Hippodrome does not in this context have the normal English meaning. I am open to suggestions or to deleting the note as unnecessary.

I think it's unnecessary. It simply confuses the issue. If anyone clicks on the link, they will see that the Hippodrome of Constantinople was a court.

first sentence of life and family is convoluted True. Changed.
the sister wasn't anonymous, just unnamed Changed.
At the time of the death of Basil II's successor, Emperor Constantine VIII, in 1028, he held the post of urban prefect of Constantinople (the formal head of the Senate and one of the emperor’s chief lieutenants) ??? At death of Emperor Constantine VIII in 1028, he held the.... My goodness. I didn't write that, but I am ashamed that I let it through. Changed.
needs to eliminate pufferywords (very etc) I couldn't find any "very's". I have removed one "great" and one "large".
As a member of the aristocracy, Romanos III abandoned his predecessors' curtailment of the privileges of the nobility and reduced their taxes sentences like this should be cleaned up. too confusing. As an aristocrat, R abandoned the policies that curtailed the privileges of the nobility, and reduced their taxes. At the same time, he embarked upon a building scheme etc.... These practices resulted in.... As emperor he was no longer a member of the aristocracy. This was important to the Byzantines and a specialist editor will likely object if I went with that. I have rewritten the whole paragraph to try to make the subsidiary and main points clearer. What do you think?

@Auntieruth55: I forgot to ping you. Embarrassing phraseology changed. Unclear points rewritten. Some pufferywords removed. Explanation for footnote given. Hopefully in better shape now. Gog the Mild (talk) 08:56, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I tweaked a few more spaces, put link things together. this should be ready to go. Just read it through one more time and ping me.

@Auntieruth55: Many thanks for all of the work you have put into this. I had already deleted the note re the Hippodrome. (For info, the Hippodrome of Constantinople was a horse racing course. The Covered Hippodrome was the nickname for the High Court; due to language slippage over the centuries. But by all means let's not go there.) I have tweaked a couple of word duplications, spellings and moved a misplaced sentence. It is probably as good as we are going to get it right now. Over to you to make the call. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:02, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail: