Talk:Romania in the Early Middle Ages/GA1

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Well-written

Lead section - "The Early Middle Ages in Romania could be said..." - Who stated this?
Background: Dacia Traina section - On "...Dacia-speaking^[5] Carpians...", move ^[5] after Carpians to clear up.
- In the third paragraph, add against between "...were competing..." and "...each other,..."
- In the last sentence of the last paragraph, change "...and landed proprieotrs: the poorer..." to "...landed propreitors which the poorer...". Also define "landed propreitors". How soon did the Dacian province revert to its pre-Roman ways?
Late Antiquity: Roman withdrawl section - Where is modern Dobrogea located now? Please list in the the first sentence of the third paragraph.
- In the last sentence of the third paragraph, add s after "epidemic" and change "rapacious" to "plunderous".

Background:Late Antiquity: Guthiuda section - change "..the "land of the Goths" (Guthiuda)." to "...the "land of the Goths" or Guthiuda." in the first sentence of the second paragraph. In the second sentence of the second paragraph, Define we (WP:WEASEL).
- In the first sentence of the third paragraph, change "...the Thervingi ("forest people")..." to "...the Thervingi or the "forest people"..." and list the current location of the river Dniester.
- In the second sentence of the fourth paragraph, change "are" to "were".
- In the second sentence of the sixth paragraph, add "a" between "...was ordained..." and "...bishop to...", change "...territories (many..." to "...territories with many...", remove "were" between "...these were descended...", and remove ) after prisoner.
- In the second sentence of the seventh paragraph, add "that" between "...army..." and "...contributed to..."
- In the first sentence of the eighth paragraph, change "...Greuthungi (the Goths living..." to "...Greuthungi where the Goths lived..." and remove ) after Dniester. Who are the contemporaries mentioned in the second paragraph? In the last sentence of this paragraph, change "...population group: men, women, and children,..." to "...population groups with men, women, and children..."
- In the second sentence of the ninth paragraph, change "...clearly reveals this process of disintegration." to "...clearly revealed this disintegration process." For the third sentence, change "...fates: some delayed conquest, or perhaps avoided it altogehter,..." and "..., but, however, long it took, most (if not all) of the Goths..." to "...fates with some delaying conquest of avoiding it altogether,..." and "..., but, however long it took, most if not all of the Goths...". In the last sentence, change "...of 50,000; this group..." to "...of 50,000. This group...".
- For the second sentence of the tenth paragraph, change "...also in forests (over 70%..." and "...forests during that time). ..." to "...also in forest since over 70%..." and "...forest then. ..." In the finals sentence of this paragraph, change "...phenomenon of the natives: although...", "...difficult, it has thus provided...", "...the unity of the Romanian language, the Romanian identity, religion, and habits." to "...phenomenon of the natives. Although...", "...difficult, it provided...", and "the unity of Romania's language, identity, religion, and habits."

Background The Hun Empire (c. 376/420 - 469) section
- Define "We" in the first sentence of the first paragraph. For the second sentence "It seems reasonable to suppose...", can this suppose be verified (WP:WEASEL)? In the last sentence, change "...that 420, and quite probably by 410, the Huns..." to "...that between 410 and 420, the Huns..."
- For the first sentence of the second paragraph, change pastorialism to raising livestock.
- In the fourth sentence of the third paragraph, change "...Singidunum (today Belgrade in Serbia) to Novæ (now Svishtov in Bulgaria),..." to "...Singidumnum (now Belgrade, Serbia) to Novæ (now Svishtov, Bulgaria),..." Also use {{Convert}} on the distances shown in this sentence.
- For the second sentence of the third paragraph, change "..Hun army in the Battle..." to "...Hun army at the Battle...". In the fourth sentnece, change "...not disappeared suddenly from the Carpathian region; in the..." to "...not disappear suddenly from the Carpathian region. In the...".

Background: Gepidia (454-567) section
- For the word "convulsions" in the first sentence of the first paragraph, would "seizure" be a better word? On the second sentence, change "...Dacia: afterwards,..." to "...Dacia. Afterwards,...". In the final sentence, change "...widespread: in the..." to "...widespread. In the..."
- In the first sentence of the final paragraph, change "...Sirmium (today in Serbia),..." to "...Sirmium (now in Serbia),...". For the final sentence validate "seem" in the sentence (WP:WEASEL).

The Dark Ages: The early Slavs (5th-7th centuries) section
- Where "likely" is in the first sentence of the first paragraph, please validate. Ditto for "may be" in the second paragraph.
- Specify "The written sources" mentioned in the first sentence of the second paragraph. Change "...elements: local..." to "...elements. Local..." in the second sentence of the second paragraph. In the third sentence of the second paragraph, specify how long Romanian site have been excavated and when did those brief periods took place?
- Rewrite that second sentence of the third paragraph because it makes no sense whatsoever.
- In the first sentence of the final paragraph, change sentence to "The Slavs were the third element, including the Dacians or other tribes, and the Romans, that played a certain part in the configuraions of the Romanians' personality. In relating wiht Romanians, the Slavs played the same role as the one played by the Germanic elements in the case of other Romanian peoples."

The Dark Ages:The Avar Khaganate (567-797/803) section
- Who is the ruler listed in the first sentence of the first paragraph. For the second paragraph, change "...Europe: a vast...", "...peoples (various...", and "...Huns) was...." to "...Europe. This includes a vast...", "...peoples such as various...", and "Huns was below..."
- Change "...units, in the..." to "...units in the..." in the first sentence of the second paragraph.
- Confirm the second sentence of the third paragraph, the first sentence of the fourth paragraph, the first sentence of the fifth paragraph, the last sentence of the fifth paragraph, and the sixth paragraph. They all seem vague.
- For the last sentence of the fifth paragraph, change the sentence in pararenthese into a sentence unto itself.
- In the sixth paragraph, change "...periods: there..." to "...periods. There..."

The Dark Ages: Bulgaria before Baptism (632-864) section
- For the first sentence of the first paragraph, change "...Bulgars (a nomadic Turkic-speaking people)..." to "...Bulgars, a Turkic-speaking people,...". In the second sentence, add "in Moldava" after Bessarabia.
- Confirm the last sentence of the second paragraph because it sound vague.
- On the second sentence of the third paragraph, when did the archaelogical surveys take place and when did the mixed settlements of Slavs and Bulgars actually occur? Use {{Convert}} for the third sentence of the third paragraph on the 12 miles listed. Confirm "This suggest" in the final sentence of the third paragraph.
- For the second sentence of the fourth paragraph, change "...Dridu culture (8th to 11th centuries) the..." to "...Dridu culture which ranged from the 8th to 11th centuries,..."
- Confirm "may have" in the first sentence of the fifth paragraph.
- Specify sources in the "Contemporary sources" of the first sentence of the final paragraph. WP:WEASEL

The Dark Ages: Thie first political structures (8th-9th centuries)
- Spell out 8th and 9th in the first sentence of the first paragraph.
- For the second paragraph, when in the 1110s did The Russian Primary Chronicle was published?
- Who delivered the view in the "One view.." of the last sentence of the third paragraph? In that same sentence, change "...(Vlachs); on..." to "...(Vlachs). On...".
- On the second sentence of the fourth paragraph, an opinion was stated in "...it would be a mistake to treat the Gesta...". Can this be clarified into fact?
- For the first bullet point of the fifth paragraph, remove "...(actually, on "the people that are called Cozar" are mentioned in the Gesta)... in the first sentence.
- For the second bullet of the fifth paragraph, change "..Banat; it was.." to "...Banat, which was..." in the first sentence.
- For the third bullet of the fifth paragraph, there is a lot of speculation. Please specify on this bullet point. Change "...and Slavs; Gleou..." to "...and Slavs. Gelou..." in the second sentence.

The Dark Ages: The Magyars (c.839 - c. 1028) section
- In the second sentence of the first paragraph is Moslem "Muslim"?
- In the last sentence of the third paragraph, change "...inhabited: people (mostly of Slavic tongue)..." to "...inhabited. People mostly of Slavic tongue..." Specify acutal distance in tens or hundreds of kilometers using {{Convert}} and when did the Magyars settle specifically?
- For the first sentence of the fourth paragraph, change "..leaders (the gyula) visited..." to "..leaders, the gyula, visited...". Who was the gyula that visited Constantinople in the second sentence? Change "is" to "was" in the final sentence.
- Change "...West: their..." to "...West. Their..." in the first sentence of the fifth paragraph. For the second paragraph, change "...Basin: therefore..." to "...Basin though..." Specify who "We" is in the third sentence.
- Change "...Vidin (today in Bulgaria)." to "...Vidin, now in Bulgaria." in the first sentence of the final paragraph. In the second sentence of the final paragraph, change "...Morisena (today Cenad in Romania) where he established..." to "...Morisena (now Cenad Romania) where Ahtum established..."

The Dark Ages: First Bulgarian Empire after Baptism (864-1018) section - no issues found.

The Dark Ages: Patzinakia (c.895 - 1121) section
- Change "concluded" to "formed" in the first sentence of the first paragraph.
- In the fourth sentence of the fourth paragraph, change "...is Vlach (that is Romanian)." to "...is Vlach in Romanian." For the last sentence in that same paragraph, specify the Russian sources listed in the "Black Hats".
- In the fifth paragraph, it looks as if this was speculation. Please confirm this.
- For the final paragraph, change "...at Mount Levunion; it was the decimation..." in the first sentence to "...at Mount Levunion, specifically in the decimation...". For the final sentence, add "with" between "..in 1121.." and "...an attempt...".

State Formation and the Last waves of the Migrations: Banat, Crişana, Maramureş, and Transylvania (c. 1000-1241) section
- Clarify the first sentence of the first paragraph because it is confusing. For the second sentence, change "..in the battle; his corps..." to "...in the battle. His corps...". In the final sentence, clarify this sentence because it is vague.
- Change "he" to "Stephen" in the second sentence of the second paragraph.
- Confirm the number of castle districts listed in Transylvania in the second sentence of the fourth paragraph. Is it five or six?
- In the first sentence of the fifth paragraph, change "...against foreign incusrions; in 1068 and 1085, the Pechengs and the Oghuz invaded the country, and in 1091, its..." to "...against foreign incursions three times, in 1068 first against the Pechengs, then in 1085 against the Oghuz, and finally in 1091, its eastern..."
- For the second sentence of the sixth paragraph, change "The archaeological..." to "Archaeological..." and state when this evidence was discovered.
- In the opening sentence of the seventh paragraph, reword. How can Romanians suddenly occur after 1210? What caused them to do this? For the third sentence, add "as" between "...Middle Ages..." and "...a separate...".
- For the first sentence of the eighth paragraph, change "...in Transylvania; after..." to "...in Transylvania. After..." For the third sentence, change "...of his favor; during the 89..." to "...of his favor. During the 89...". For the last sentence, "suggest" is a weasel word (WP:WEASEL). Please confirm this.
- In the last sentence of the ninth paragraph, WP:WEASEL. Please confirm this.

State Formation and the Last waves of the Migrations: Cumania (1065-1241) section
- Change "...Balkan Peninsula (1065 and succeeding year)." to "...Balkan Peninsula in 1065 and succeeding years." in the second sentence of the lead paragraph.
- For the opening sentence of the second paragraph, change "meddling" to "meddled". For the second sentence of the second paragraph, how many different sources were used and what are the names of those sources? In the final sentence of this paragraph, what are the differences between the "Black Cumans" and the "White Cumans"? Please specify.
- In the opening sentence of the third paragraph, add ", located in present day Moldova, Romania, and Ukraine." after "...the river Prut". For the second sentence, change "...agriculturists, not..." to "...agriculturists and not..." In the final paragraph, when did this archaeological evidence occur? Also, change "...Moldova diminished in size or altogehter disappeared." to "...Moldova either diminshed in size or disappeared altogether."
- For the fourth paragraph, it lists "may have been" in both the second and third sentence. This WP:WEASEL. Please confirm both of this.
- In the second sentence of the sixth paragraph, what mde the Cuman chiefs unceratin of the Mongol attack after the battle?
- For the third sentence of the seventh paragraph, when was the next result of the existing evidence? In the final paragraph, "sometimes intrepreted" is WP:WEASEL. Clarify this.
- In the eighth paragraph's opening sentence, what made the Tartar campaign so great? In the second paragraph, how many waves of Cuman exodus to Bulgaria take place? Please specify number and time period the Cuman exoduses took place.

State Formation and the Last waves of the Migrations: Second Bulgarian Empire section
- In the second sentence, change "...personal character: two..." to "...personal character. Two..." Also confirm is Peter and Asen were really Vlachs (WP:WEASEL). Additionally, define pronoia in that same sentence.

State Formation and the Last waves of the Migrations: The Mongol invasion (1241-1242) section
- In the second sentence of the second paragraph, change "...Batu (a grandson of Genghis Khan)." to "...Baku, a grandson of Genghis Khan."
- For the first sentence of the third paragraph, change "...Vlachs"); Böček..." to "...Vlachs"). Böček...". In the second sentence, add commas (,) between "...on April 11, 1241..."
- Confirm the first sentence of the final paragraph. WP:WEASEL.

After the Migrations section.
- In the first sentence of the first paragraph, how short at time did The Kingdom of Hungary recovered its strength and what year(s) did it take place? Confirm the information on the second paragraph with more valid information.
- In the final sentence of the final paragraph, list when The Battle of Posada took place.

Factually accurate and verifiable

See comments in the Well-written section.
Sourcing is accurate though it is a lot of non-web sourcing used so it makes verifying off-site sources difficult.

Broad in its coverage

Does address main aspects of topic though there is a lot of speculation.
Stays focused though it covers a long time period which can allow for easy distraction.

Neutral

Stays neutral though there is a lot of vagueness and speculation listed in the 'Well-written section.

Stable

Last edit was done on 4 March 2010.

Images

All images shown are valid. - no issues.

Overall

Hold. It needs a lot of work, but it can be done.

Reviewer: Chris (talk) 15:11, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA1 review was complete in talk page and it looks good. Passed. Chris (talk) 17:37, 18 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]