Talk:Rock with U/GA1

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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 10:36, 1 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Stamile and Dupri" → "the last two"
Is the "for the kids" quote necessary here? I guess it could be paraphrased or substituted with 'for its members' (referring to the gay community).
Perhaps you could address the Bubbling Under positions (at least the Under Hot 100)

"Electroboogie" could be changed to "electro groove", it's too casual.
Is MWZA reliable?
"herself" will be easier to understand if substituted by Jackson
Riffs is in plural form, so "it" in this sentence is gramatically incorrect.
"Building on the original's bed of synthesized chord changes, the producers layer in swirling keyboards, vocoder whispers and the singer's own distended murmurs." — blatant copyvio; what is the original?
If the song talks about an "erotic proposition", what relation does it have with the gay community?

As a rule of thumb, the length of a sample should be approximately 10% of the song's original length. In this case, 23 seconds is the maximum. The caption could be rephrased a bit just so it doesn't repeat what's in the section. At least so they aren't the exact same words.

Suggestion: How about merging this section with the next one, and reorder the information so it goes "Release and reception" (that being the title too)? It's just that the Release section is a bit small.

Suggestion: Merge this section with Live performance, change the title and explain how she was dressed during that tour and what she did during it.

Almost all

Done, except the live performance informations which I didn't find. Alex ^{talk page!} 23:01, 1 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]