Talk:Rock Show (Parks and Recreation)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Rock Show (Parks and Recreation)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   In the Plot, this sentence ---> "Mark (Paul Schneider) feels lonely because is the only one at the concert without a date", there's something missing there. In the Reception section, "The A.V. Club writer Keith Phipps, who had been unsure about the Parks and Recreation throughout the season", this sentence reads very odd.

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

   In the Production section, this is me, but you might want to add "http" to the website. In the Cultural references section, the hyphens needs to be dashes. In the Reception section, italicize "The A.V. Club".

2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   I believe Image:Parks and recreation rock show.jpg needs a lower resolution.

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   If the statements above can be answered, I will pass the article. Good luck with improving this article!

--  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 15:18, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

• I think I've addressed most of your concerns here. I dropped the dashes altogether (somebody else made them into a list that didn't really work) and simply changed it to a sentence with commas, let me know if that works for you. I am at work so I can't drop the resolution on the photo from here, but I can easily do that when I get home. Regarding the sentence, "Mark (Paul Schneider) feels lonely because is the only one at the concert without a date", can you give me some feedback as to what you want me to do with it? I think it seems pretty clear right now; the guy is the only one without a date at the concern, so he's bummed out. If you can tell me what's unclear I will change it. Thanks for the review! — Hunter Kahn _(c) 18:28, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
  • Its fine regarding the Cultural references section. Well, do the resolution thing, cause I don't want to get in trouble with the article getting delisted, cause it'll hurt you, than it would me. Okay, the sentence "Mark (Paul Schneider) feels lonely because is the only one at the concert without a date", its missing "he" between "because" and "is", cause if you don't have that there, the sentence just reads awkwardly. That's just me. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 19:05, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
    • Nope, you were totally right, I was just missing it. Fixed that, and the photo. Thanks! — Hunter Kahn _(c) 02:12, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
      • Okay, cause I was feeling dumb during all this. But, I'm glad you agree. :) Overall, everything checks out. Thank you to Hunter K. for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 14:28, 18 June 2009 (UTC)