Talk:Robin Lehner/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 20:23, 20 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Lede

I think I've mentioned this a few times, but can we try to avoid two links next to each other - ice hockey goaltender. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:33, 20 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- This is the first time I think this particular issue has come up; it's pretty standard for the WP to be phrased as "professional ice hockey [position with link]", not sure how to rephrase in a way that wouldn't be awkward. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
father, Henrik Lundqvist's personal coach - needs a reword. is Henrik his father, or is his personal coach the father? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:33, 20 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed to who personally coached Henrik Lundqvist. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
but opted - opting... Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:33, 20 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed to opting instead. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General

Considering the person is from Sweden, maybe use association football rather than "soccer". Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed. Article (from Canadian source) used "soccer" so I accidentally overlooked. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Only 19 years old at the time, Lehner became both the youngest goaltender in Senators history and the youngest Swedish goaltender to appear in an NHL game in his debut. - a bit surprised this isn't in the lede..Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Added to lede. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
taking the win - featuring in a win, prior wording suggests he won the match for the team. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Just like MLB pitchers, individual goaltenders are credited with wins and losses, so I can change this if desired, but the old wording is still accurate. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
helped carry - puff, avoid. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Rephrased sentence.
taking the loss - I'm sure these are American terms, but they can be rewritten to just state the team lost. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- See below. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
taking the loss in the 7–6 Western Conference victory.[33 - did they win or lose then? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Rephrased as goaltending for the Eastern Conference team in their 7–6 loss to the West.
Meanwhile, after his exit, minor-league goaltender Andrew Hammond was called up and proceeded to take the Senators on a winning streak to the 2015 Stanley Cup playoffs - this isn't really about this subject. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
His luck did not continue - are we saying all his previous victories were lucky? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed to He was less effective. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
dominate - puff, avoid. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed to was adept in net. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Just a note - it is a "semi-final" internationally. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed in the international section but not in the main body, as the NHL uses "semifinal". — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Where are the statistics section sourced? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 22 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Added source. — Ghost River 18:52, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:23, 20 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Lee Vilenski I've addressed everything except where noted. Unfortunately, it may be a moment before I can review something of yours, as I am still recovering from my motorcycle crash and will be moving across town in a couple of weeks. — Ghost River 18:53, 27 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]