Talk:Robert Ardini
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Hi, I've been hired by Robert Ardini to request some updates to this article. I know this doesn't fully address the flags at the top of the article, but hopefully it's progress:
1. Replacing the image at the top of the article with an infobox, using a better image: {{Infobox candidate
| name = Robert Ardini
| image = Robert Ardini1.jpg
| alt = Portrait of Robert Ardini
| caption =
| birth_date = {{birth based on age as of date|55|2016|08|12}}
| birth_place = [[Queens, New York]]<ref name="Phillips"/>
| residence = [[Long Island City, New York]]<ref name="Mollot"/>
| education = Bachelor's degree, [[University of the State of New York]]<ref name="Phillips">{{cite news |last1=Phillips |first1=Megan |title=Robert Ardini |url=https://presidentialhopefuls.org/2020/02/04/robert-ardini/ |accessdate=29 March 2020 |work=Klein College of Media and Communication |publisher=Temple University |date=4 February 2020}}</ref>
| candidate = [[2020 Republican Party presidential primaries|2020 Republican Party presidential nomination]]
| party = [[Republican Party (United States)|Republican]]
| election_date = February 3 to June 23, 2020
| opponent = [[Donald Trump]] and [[2020_Republican_Party_presidential_primaries#Candidates|numerous others]]
| incumbent =
| occupation = Politician and author
| website = {{URL|robertardini.com}} }}
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2. In first sentence:
- a. Move ref to end of sentence per WP:MOS.
- b. Update "retired advertising executive" to "politician and former advertising executive", since politics are a major part of Ardini's notability, and he is not considered retired.
3. In first paragraph of "Biography", update "flower fancier" (which is not a known term by any metric I checked) to "rose enthusiast".
4. In second paragraph of "Biography", replace
He won the primary, and lost the general election in a landslide to Carolyn Maloney.
- with
He won the primary, positioning himself as socially moderate and fiscally conservative.[2] He lost the general election to Carolyn Maloney, receiving 16.8% of the vote.[3]
- (Added source, revised for neutrality and to reflect source.)
5. Next sentence: replace
He later wrote a memoir about his experience entitled Running[4].
- with
He later wrote a book, Running for Congress in Trump's Backyard, about his experience, and self-published it through CreateSpace.[5]
- (Formatting fix, swapped in a secondary source, added detail to reflect source, corrected book title and removed inaccurate genre categorization.)
6. Last sentence of "Biography": update paid the fees to paid the required fees and met the other qualifications. (Just to contextualize that all candidates pay the same fees to appear on the ballot.)
7. Under "2020 presidential totals" section header, add: {{Further|Results of the 2020 Republican Party presidential primaries}}
8. For CA's 2020 total, add: 12,580[6]
9. For CO's 2020 total, add: 3,346[7]
10. For UT's 2020 total, add: 3,971[8]
11. Add categories: [[Category:1960 births]] [[Category:1961 births]] [[Category:21st-century American businesspeople]] [[Category:Candidates in the 2020 United States presidential election]]
Thank you for any feedback/assistance! Mary Gaulke (talk) 14:20, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
References
- ^ a b Phillips, Megan (4 February 2020). "Robert Ardini". Klein College of Media and Communication. Temple University. Retrieved 29 March 2020.
- ^ a b Mollot, Sabina (12 August 2016). "Maloney's opponent calls national debt, gridlock top issues". Town & Village. Retrieved 29 March 2020.
- ^ "New York U.S. House 12th District Results: Carolyn B. Maloney Wins". The New York Times. 1 August 2017. Retrieved 29 March 2020.
- ^ Cite error: The named reference
Runningwas invoked but never defined (see the help page). - ^ Mollot, Sabina (19 March 2018). "Maloney's former opponent writes book about race". Town & Village. Retrieved 29 March 2020.
- ^ "California Presidential Republican Primary Election Results". The New York Times. 18 March 2020. Retrieved 31 March 2020.
- ^ "Colorado Republican Primary Results". USA Today. 23 March 2020. Retrieved 7 April 2020.
- ^ "Utah Republican Primary Results". USA Today. 26 March 2020. Retrieved 7 April 2020.
- @MaryGaulke: Here are the changes made.
- Request #1:
Done, but birth date and residence have been 
Declined since no source was provided. - Request #2 & 3: Done
- Request #4:
Not done The source provided are (or appear to be) personal blogs, and are generally not reliable sources. - Request #5 & 6: Not done since no source was provided.
- Request #7 ATE 9: Done
- Request #10: Done
- Request #11: Done, but births have been Declined see reply for Request #1.
- {{replyto}} Can I Log In's (talk) page 02:54, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
