Talk:Robby Fabbri/GA1
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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
- Summarizing four years with the Blues into two sentences in the lead might not be sufficient.
Done - His mother's name is mentioned in ref 6, maybe add it on to the sentence about his heritage?
- Found his dad's name too. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:03, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
- I know it's split between sections, but having two sentences beginning with "Growing up" doesn't sound that good. Done
- "and played with the year above his with" Who's "his" in this case? Done
- "150lbs" {{convert}} needed for this and 160lbs. Done
- "replace centre Tanner Richard on the team's" Might bet better to say the Rebels' first line for clarity. Done
- "the Windsor Spitfires where he recorded one assist" Comma after Spitfires. Done
- This is a better source for ref 17. Done
- "of the Game 1" Remove the "the" or go with "of the first game". Done
- "resulting in a 10 game suspension" That's not Fabbri getting suspended, right?
- Right, it was the guy who hit him. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
- "However" x 3 WP:EDITORIAL. Done
- Make sure you link the penalties and use the correct link for the coronavirus. Done
- Ref 67 got deleted, you will want to find a new source. Done
- Deleted ref and removed name
That should be it. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 06:45, 8 July 2020 (UTC)