Talk:Roads to Vegas/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:51, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Prose and clarity issues pointed out below

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   File:Road to Vegas promo.jpg fails WP:NFCC#8 and should be removed.

   Yeah. I didn't upload that, and Jclemens has already tagged it for removal. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:47, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

   I think you meant User:J Milburn, rather than me. Jclemens (talk) 17:02, 14 September 2013 (UTC)

   I was tired. Sorry J Milburn! Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 17:22, 14 September 2013 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Plot

• I don't suppose Dion's show, Celine, is mentioned by name in the episode?

• No, it isn't. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

• "Stewie decides to use the new teleportation device" - makes it sound as though Brian didn't use it. If not, why is he duplicated?

• Done. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

• What does "Checking in a casino" mean?

• I fixed this - the casino's part of the hotel. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

• "their luck makes itself present immediately with Brian hitting a big jackpot" - how about 'Brian wins a large jackpot'

• Fixed. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

• "First pair" and "second pair" and "lucky pair" and "unlucky pair" are confusing. I'm not sure which is which, and which travelled by teleportation and which by air.

• Alright, I've cleaned it up. Let me know if you have any issues with the way it's currently worded. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

Production and development

"Directed by Greg Colton, the episode is Colton's fourth Road to... episode to direct..." - choppy. How about 'The episode was directed by Greg Colton, who had previously directed "Road to Germany", "Road to the Multiverse" and "Road to the North Pole".'?

• I used a slight variation of your sentence, to show that the episode were still "Road to" episodes. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

• "The episode was revealed as the finale of the series' eleventh season with the premiere of "No Country Club for Old Men"." - I read the sources as saying this episode was the penultimate one, and "No Country Club for Old Men" was the finale, but they were aired one after the other.

• Done. I didn't change Callaghan's quote, though. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

I am placing the review on hold until these points are addressed. Adabow (talk) 22:25, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

I fixed them to the best of my abilities. Let me know what you think. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 22:45, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

Much better. I wonder if you could mention somewhere that this episode and "No Country Club for Old Men" were aired back-to-back and together made the season "double episode" finale. Adabow (talk) 23:40, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

I've added it into the lead and the production and development section. I think that's what you wanted. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 23:47, 13 September 2013 (UTC)

Excellent. Passing now. Well done! Adabow (talk) 00:01, 14 September 2013 (UTC)