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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 18:42, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Will review soon. Glimmer721 talk 18:42, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:

  • Suppose the running time should be added to the infobox (check others?)
  • "The episode first aired in the United States on November 26, 2000, on Fox..." No comma before "on Fox"
  • "The parasitic creature, designed to look like a banana slug, that was used in the episode was created via animatronics." → "The parasitic creature that was used in the episode was designed to look like a bana slug and was created via animatronics"
  • "They surround the man as he futilely tries to escape." Clarify: Which man are we talking about, the hitchhiker or the one with crutches?
  • "Scully talks with the hitchhiker, who's name is Hank" - "who's" should be "whose"
  • "Eventually, Doggett finds Scully and manages to cut the worm out of her. Eventually, he shoots the creature dead, while the cultists mourn the loss of the worm." Two consecutive sentences that begin with "eventually", needs to be reworded. It didn't take that long, did it?
  • The plot is, in general, kind of choppy.
  • "The script, called "uncharacteristically brutal" for Gilligan—who was noted for his comedic episodes like "Bad Blood" and "X-Cops"—was written..." Add bolded words. Could also be "who had been"
  • "Many fans were unhappy with the way Doggett talked down to Scully..." "Talked down" is kind of slang.
  • "Harrisson praised the character development of "Roadrunners"..." → "Harrisson praised the character development in "Roadrunners"..."
  • "He wrote that "Better than 'Patience' and highly competent..." → "He wrote that it was..."

Putton on hold for 7 days while issues are addressed. Pretty minor issues. I do reccommend a copyedit on the plot, though, so it flows better. Glimmer721 talk 19:16, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I addressed all the non-plot issues. I'll straighten that out later tonight, hopefully.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:30, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I'd tried cleaning it up a bit. How is it now?--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:21, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Better. I will pass now. Glimmer721 talk 14:35, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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