Talk:Road Rash II/GA1
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Reviewer: Indrian (talk · contribs) 22:04, 2 March 2020 (UTC)
I suppose it only makes sense to come back for the sequel. Substantive comments to follow soon. Indrian (talk) 22:04, 2 March 2020 (UTC)
Sorry for the wait; I took this on and then the world went haywire. Lets get this done!
Lead
[edit]- "The game is based on a series of road races" - "Based on" just feels weird here, because that phrase usually denotes when a property in one format is adapted to another format, like if the game play was based on real races or something. I would just choose a slightly different turn of phrase.
- "The development of Road Rash II was initiated" - Passive voice.
Gameplay
[edit]- "who must finish in third-place or higher" - Out of how many racers?
- "The game's races take place in a number of locales across the United States, including Hawaii, Arizona, Tennessee, Alaska, and Vermont." - Are these the only locales? I am guessing maybe they are if there are five races. "Including" implies additional locales to the one's listed. If this is all of them, a different word would be better.
- "The player can access a bike shop from the game's main menu to view bikes for sale and potentially purchase a new bike with the money they have accumulated." - I assume these bikes must be distinguished between each other somehow in their capabilities? The article mentions the nitrous oxide charges, but I am guessing there are other differences between bikes as well.
Overall, this article is quite good. Once a couple of turns of phrase are tweaked and a couple of gameplay elements are clarified, it will be ready for promotion. I will go ahead and place the nomination 
On hold while these minor concerns are addressed. Once again, I appreciate your patience. Indrian (talk) 08:24, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- No prob. Anyway, all points have been addressed. Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 19:46, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- Sorry for yet another delay; I needed to read through the article carefully one more time. I made just a couple of light grammatical tweaks, and I am now ready to promote. Well done! Indrian (talk) 02:42, 15 May 2020 (UTC)