Talk:Rivington/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum 15:38, 10 November 2010 (UTC)

Manor

• "In 1212 Alexander de Pilkington held six oxgangs of land of King John ...". Does "land of King John" mean land belonging to King John? "Of ... of" looks strange at any rate, almost as if "land of King John" is a place.
  •  Done got rid of King John
• "In 1611, the Pilkingtons sold Rivington Old Hall estate to Robert Lever and Thomas Breres, whilst New Hall and its land was reserved for the unmarried Katharine Pilkington." It's not clear to me what "reserved" means here. In general I found the various estates a bit difficult to follow. Is it the case that what's called Rivington Hall in the first paragraph is the Rivington Old Hall mentioned in the second? Who built Rivington New Hall and when?
  •  Done I agree it's confusing so I got rid of New Hall and not particularly significant--J3Mrs (talk) 19:30, 10 November 2010 (UTC)
• "Robert Andrews, partially rebuilt Rivington Hall in red brick in the Georgian style in 1774". Is that Rivington Old Hall or Rivington New Hall?
  •  Done Old hall no longer mentioned
• "John Andrews ... was responsible for building the Pike tower in 1733." Should that be "Pike Tower"?
  •  Done capitalised
• "The Rivington Hall estate was acquired by compulsory purchase by Liverpool Corporation in 1902. Lever Park, a 360-acre (1.5 km2) country park, is owned by United Utilities." Again, is this the new hall or the old one, or is there now only one Rivington Hall estate? How does Lever Park fit into the scheme of things?
  •  Done tried explaining

Industries

• "Milne and Milne Hill are mentioned in a deed of 1544". What does either have to do with Rivington?
  •  Done

Geography

• "The village is accessed from the west by a road on top of the 267m long Horrobin Embankment". Everyhere else imperial units have been used, with conversions to metric.
  • My brain isn't working so I'll think about this later
    •  Done Fixed it myself. Malleus Fatuorum 20:26, 10 November 2010 (UTC)
• "In 1901 ... the reservoirs and filter beds occupied 275 acres (1.11 km2)." So they're no longer that size? What happened since 1901 to shrink or expand them?
  •  Done

Demography

• This section seem,s a bit light. We're told how far those who are employed travel to work, but not how many of the residents are employed, or retired or whatever. What industries do those who are employed work in?
  • The source didn't say, there aren't that many workers out of the 144. I'll have a look:)
    • I've added three more refs

Economy

• "In the 19th century farming became less economic when construction of the reservoirs reduced the amount of agricultural land in the village, the weaving industry was mechanised, the small mines closed and the population declined further when properties in the village were demolished in the early 20th century." This sentence needs to be split, trying to cram too much in.
  •  Done
• "... when the area was known as the little lake district". Should "little lake district" be capitalised?
  •  Done
• "... making tourism the greatest source of income in the area." I'm not keen on "greatest". What about something like "most significant"?
  •  Done
• "... Lever Park and the terraced gardens every year". Are the terraced gardens in Lever Park? If so, better to say "Lever Park and its terraced gardens".
  •  Done

Religion

• "Rivington Church is built on a hill known as 'chapel croft'." If Chapel Croft is its name, then why isn't it capitalised? What do the scare quotes signify? That Chapel Croft isn't really its name?
  •  Done

Lever Park

• "The private gardens contained terraces and a pool, a Japanese lake and pagoda, Italian-style gardens, the seven-arched bridge and the Pigeon Tower with Lady Leverhulme's sewing room on the top floor." Why does this say "the seven-arched bridge" instead of "a seven-arched bridge"?
  •  Done

• "In 1974 the park and gardens passed to the North West Water Authority". Passed to is a bit vague. Did North West Water buy it from Magee?
  •  Done

Listed buildings

• This section needs to be expanded, perhaps with a few examples of the more notable structures ... actually I don't understand why this section is included at all, as examples of the listed buildings were given earlier in the Rivington conservation area section.
  •  Done

Sport

• "The Holcombe Hunt meets each year at Rivington Barn." Is that what was earlier called Rivington Hall Barn?
  •  Done

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