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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:15, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will read this article and leave some comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 20:15, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

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  • "The song is a throwback to the 1990s R&B music" - rewrite this portion of text to The song is a throwback to R&B music of the 1990s
  • "directed by team the Young Astronauts who added a concept inspired by William Shakespeare's work Romeo and Juliet. " - directed by the Young Astronauts team
  • "The single is certified gold in the U.S." - should be United States for consistency
  • "she also promoted it at the televised show, Jimmy Kimmel Live!." - on

Background and composition

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  • "Grande's vocals was recorded London Bridge's Studios in Los Angeles, California," = Grande recorded her lines at London Bridge's Studios in Los Angeles, California,
  • "The singer spoke of the mutual interest she and rapper Big Sean" - delink Big Sean since he's already linked in the same paragraph that this text is in
  • "Sean agree," - agrees
  • "And noted Grande's innocence" - Catucci

Release and reception

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  • "Jenna Rubenstein of MTV wrote praised Grande's performance in the song writing - remove "wrote"
  • "Kevin Goddarg of HotNewHipHop website felt that" - Kevin Goodard of the website HotNewHipHop felt that
  • "Williot added that Grande shows off her range once again, with all some" - all with some

Commercial performance

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  • "The song has spent eight weeks on the chart while archived top ten positions" - The song spent eight weeks on the chart and it placed in the top ten

Background and composition

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  • Italicize Romeo and Juliet
  • "Grande, dressed as Juliet, catches the eye of another party-goer dressed as Romeo." - attracts the attention
  • "The video also received inspirations from the modern film interpretation Romeo + Juliet directed by Baz Luhrmann." - The video was also inspired by the modern film interpretation of Romeo + Juliet directed by Baz Luhrmann.
  • "During an interview for MTV News website," - the MTV News website
  • "Todorovic told that the references to Baz Luhrmann's" - drop the first name of Luhrmann since that is mentioned earlier in the paragraph this section of text this is in

Synopsis

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  • "As the song progress, Grande down the long stairs of the mansion in direction to where the party is taking place," - As the song progresses, Grande walks down own the long stairs of the mansion to where the party is taking place.
  • "once in the floor, she appears performing a sultry choreography using her hand fan among with the guests of the glamorous event." - Once there, she appears performing a sultry choreography using her hand fan among with the guests of the glamorous event.
  • "Swarzenegger arrives at the mansion with his friends, they jump the gate of it as it was closed and they appear to be late." - Swarzenegger arrives at the mansion with his friends. They jump over the gate as if it was closed and they appear to be late.
  • "He enter the masqueraded event is immediately finds Grande who is seen admired by him, smiling into his face" - He enters the masqueraded event and immediately finds Grande who admires him by smiling into his face.
  • "She tries to approach him however, some guests embarrass her vision and when she look again, he is not there anymore. " - As she tries to apporach him, some guests block her vision and when she looks again, he is no longer there.
  • "for a late-night make-out session," - end this part of text with a period not a comma

Live performances

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  • "In 2013, Grande performed an acoustic version of "Right There" for some radio stations during interview and event" - interviews and events
  • "She performed the single version at the Jimmy Kimmel Live!," - on Jimmy Kimmel Live!,
  • Wikilink SAP Center and Dick Clark's New Year's Rockin' Eve
  • "in Times Square, New York City." - New York City's Times Square

References

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  • The Twitter citations needs to include the text of what Grande wrote in the title field. See Template:Cite tweet for a few examples
  • Reference 7 is missing the publisher of the work
  • Reference 19's access date should be written as January 21, 2014
  • Reference 22 is lacking the date of when the video was published on Grande's YouTube channel
  • References 18, 20, 40 and 42 are missing the dates they were accessed

Those were all the things that stood out in my read-through. This review will be put on hold for the time being. MWright96 (talk) 11:05, 19 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Yo. All issues have been adressed. I apologize for this late response. UrbanJE (talk) 20:18 May 25, 2018 (UTC)
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