Talk:Richie Powell/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 20:14, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The lede doesn't effectively summarise the whole article. You need to give some examples of recordings, performing engagements and more on his technical aspects.

Added the Grammy album; kept it broad (U.S.) on touring; put in a summary of his style. EddieHugh (talk) 21:55, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"He also became arranger for the quintet.[1] They performed and rehearsed a lot, then had several recording sessions that August, which resulted in their first album, Brown and Roach Incorporated.[14] Powell was also" -rep of "also"

Reworded. EddieHugh (talk) 21:27, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Recordings made of the Brown–Roach quintet at the same event were released decades later" -a bit vague, can you be more precise?

Not via a proper source, no. There was a mid-2000s release and I don't see them mentioned in discogs from earlier, but they might have been released (even more unofficially) ealier. EddieHugh (talk) 21:17, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Another Powell song was "Gertrude's Bounce", named, according to the pianist, following his admiration for the way in which artist Gertrude Abercrombie walked." -a bit of a mouthful, can you reword a bit?

Reworded. EddieHugh (talk) 21:27, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"They also had live national radio broadcasts in April and May." -can you elaborate here?

Do you mean from where, etc.? EddieHugh (talk) 21:17, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@EddieHugh:, What radio stations/where?♦ Dr. Blofeld 22:08, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The initial source didn't have much more, so I found another couple that gave the/a broadcaster and the location. EddieHugh (talk) 23:33, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Brown, 25; and Powell, 24." -unsourced

I can add sources if you wish, but it's not controversial or disupted info. Unfortunately, the source for the age of RP's wife (the only one I've seen for that) gets CB's age wrong. EddieHugh (talk) 21:17, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ideally there should be no unsourced info at the bottom of any paragraph, even if not controversial. If they got the age wrong though then it's not easy!♦ Dr. Blofeld 22:10, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I thought of e-mailing him to correct it... found a source for each age and added each separately, so that the erroneous (for CB) one is for NP's age only. EddieHugh (talk) 23:33, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Tyner also got some of his inspiration to develop his chord voicings, which became the norm for jazz pianists,[38] because he heard Richie voice left-hand chords in fourths.[4" -could be worded better, try something like "Powell's left hand chords in fourths were also an influence on Tyner's chord voicings" developments

Slightly tricky, but see what you think of the new version. I wanted to avoid repetition of "influence" and retain Tyner's subsequent influence, so split the sentence. EddieHugh (talk) 21:55, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

In referencing you're inconsistent with using the bibliography and the citations. Ideally all books should go together. I gather you decide to put books in the bibliography when you use it more than once?

If the page used is different, so not just for books. EddieHugh (talk) 21:17, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Considering how short his career was and he died only at 24, I think this is adequate. Good job.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:57, 2 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Indeed: there isn't much on him and most of it is via sources that are about his brother or Brown. The article may be the best single source on RP available at the moment. EddieHugh (talk) 11:28, 2 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]