Talk:Rhonda Sing/GA1

GA Review

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GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Automatic peer review

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question. (Note: I like to use this as a guide . . .there are almost always suggestions here that are not useful. However, the persondata is a good one. I removed all those that I believe have been fixed or do not apply. Mitico (talk) 14:30, 7 November 2008 (UTC))[reply]

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Done

Initial impressions

My initial impressions are positive. Superficially, it's a shorter article that is heavily sourced to two primary references. These are not necessarily negatives, just points I'll be looking to ensure the article broad in its coverage. Details to follow... Mitico (talk) 14:30, 7 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Detailed review

Well written

I think the lead should include a sentence mentioning her death and/or retirement. Done
In Training: Done

"Sing attended numerous Stampede Wrestling cards" I know what a "card" is, but is this jargony. Consider replacing with "events".
"(Bret Hart claims it had more to do with scheduling conflicts)" - parenthesis seem unnecessary.
"She later wrote Mildred Burke, after a friend gave her a magazine with Burke's contact information,and sent her a biography and photo.[3] She later joined Burke's training facility in Encino, California." Two consecutive sentences starting with "She later," also can you specify how much later she joined Burke (a week? or two years?). If unknown, maybe something like "Shortly thereafter . . ."

In Japan and Canada Done

"Sing's debut match in Japan was with partner Mami Komeni," can you clarify that this was a tag team match.
"During her time in the promotion" Promotion feels like jargon. I understand it, but maybe you could briefly explain what a Professional wrestling promotion is or re-state so that it would be clear to a general audience.
"Dynamite Kid, who was also originally from Calgary." DK was originally from England, but moved to Calgary for training.
"prior to returning to the territory." Which territory? She won in Alberta before returning to Japan, or is this vice-versa? This needs to be clarified. Also, include in the prose that she was the first holder of this title. Currently its just in the list below & in the lead.

In Personal life Done

"Sing hung out mostly with the male wrestlers." Can you re-state this to be less casual?
Consider changing the death to a "result of undisclosed medical problems." Most people die of medical problems. I think its better to say that her's were not disclosed to the public.

Manual of Style Done

(February 21, 1961 – July 27, 2001) should be written (February 21, 1961 – July 27, 2001) per WP:dash (see wikicoding)
I added some non-breaking spaces to the infobox for weights/heights, etc.

Broad in its coverage: Done

The infobox states she retired in 2001. Did she "retire" or did her death cause her retirement? It seems if she was working as a health care provider she may have actually retired. When was her last match?
In Championships and accomplishments it mentions that she was 5 time "World Wrestling Council" champ. I do not see this mentioned in the article. Also, the lack of a in-line cite of this title stands out since the remainder do have citations.

I'll put this article on hold. The article has some problems, but with some work and clarification, I believe it will eventually be listed as a GA. Any questions, let me know. Mitico (talk) 16:50, 7 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for the review! I'll begin these tasks later today. Nikki311 17:17, 7 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. I think I have completed everything. Are there any areas that need further explanation? Nikki311 20:25, 8 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

After reading the article again and reviewing the changes, I believe the article meets all the standards of a good article. Congratulations. - mitico (talk) 17:04, 10 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]