Talk:Rhian Teasdale/GA1
GA Review
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Nominator: Launchballer (talk · contribs) 10:37, 11 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 23:32, 26 October 2024 (UTC)
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Almost there. The usual copy changes, yes, but also a question about whether mentioning "scurrilous allegations" in the lead is a good idea in a BLP. Ping when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:56, 26 October 2024 (UTC)
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Copy changes
[edit]Lead
[edit]- In July 2023, Plastic Mermaids' frontman Douglas Richards made several scurrilous allegations about Teasdale and Wet Leg. I am concerned that putting this where it is in the lead is a BLP violation. The body copy and overall weight given seem fine, however.
- Plastic Mermaids is not a possessive here (it is being used as an adjective), so the apostrophe should be removed.
- If my understanding of BLP policy is correct (and tell me if it isn't), then I'm not sure I see that problem; it takes up around a seventh of the lead and around a fifth of the body. What I have done instead is changed 'made' to 'was criticised after making', as it felt unfair to omit that piece of context. I have also cut the apostrophe.
- Your changes help more than I'd have thought, and it looks a lot better. Going to approve. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:08, 27 October 2024 (UTC)
- If my understanding of BLP policy is correct (and tell me if it isn't), then I'm not sure I see that problem; it takes up around a seventh of the lead and around a fifth of the body. What I have done instead is changed 'made' to 'was criticised after making', as it felt unfair to omit that piece of context. I have also cut the apostrophe.
Life and career
[edit]- Link Formby, Isle of Wight, etc. on first body mention.
- Done all except Orlando Weeks, as that title redirects to The Maccabees, which is linked shortly afterwards.
- Is Btec usually kept in mixed case? Our article has it in all caps (BTEC)?
- Fixed.
- Don't hyphenate future-bandmate
- Fixed.
- She released the single "Solid Gold" in 2018, which she had developed with Plastic Mermaids, a band fronted by Douglas Richards and containing his brother Jamie Richards. Try In 2018, she released the single "Solid Gold", which she had developed with Plastic Mermaids, a band fronted by Douglas Richards and containing his brother Jamie Richards.
- Done, except with "Around two years later" instead of "In 2018" as the previous sentence begins "In 2016". (That "around" is doing a fair bit of lifting, given that "Pavlova" was released in early November 2016 and "Solid Gold" was released in late May 2018, but 18+ months rounds up to two years so this should be okay.)
- I think it should be double-A-side single, since there are two A-sides and there's no such thing as a "side single".
- Fixed.
- Weeks asserted that he had met the band when he performed before them at the Park Stage of Glastonbury Festival, and that he had previously declined an offer for him to appear in a video Fix your CinS issue by trying Weeks asserted that he had met the band when he performed before them at the Park Stage of Glastonbury Festival and had previously declined an offer for him to appear in a video
- Fixed.
Personal life
[edit]- had dated off and on between 2013 and 2019, and that during the Comma positioning is wrong, resulting in a CinS error. Try had dated off and on between 2013 and 2019 and that, during the
- Fixed.
- Question here. The Sunday Times is separate editorially from The Times, so shouldn't the second mention of criticism be aimed at the former, not the latter?
- Re-reading the source, I suspect that it an error, so changed.
Sourcing and spot checks
[edit]- 1: Full name as in the ASCAP repertory. This is acceptable as usually the full name.
- 3: I really wish there was a transcript so I could find a more direct quote here. This is ABOUTSELF; the interview itself might not be reliable, but it's the subject's statement.
- Going by the accessdate, I have a horrible feeling I nicked that from the Wet Leg article. I don't fancy wading through a podcast at nearly three in the morning so I've replaced the reference.
- 19: 2021 article on release of "Chaise Longue".
- 32: The original Times article.
Rhian has spoken many times about the fact her ex-boyfriend is the subject of several Wet Leg songs. “Wet Dream is a break-up song,” she told one interviewer. She is referring to Doug, something other sources close to the band have confirmed, and the pain of their break-up gives the album its defiant, savage energy. “You’re like a piece of s***, you either sink or you float,” Rhian sings in the song Piece of Shit. The thing about these ex-boyfriend albums is we almost never hear from the ex-boyfriend. How does it feel to be on the receiving end of a globally acclaimed character assassination? Put simply, what’s it like to be the piece of shit?
Other quotes and assertions check out. - 33:
To paraphrase Teasdale’s own words, he seems a bit like a “piece of shit,” indeed.
No Earwig issues: it catches attributed quotes, names of other bands mentioned as inspirations, and the phrase "the Isle of Wight".
Images
[edit]The lone image is libre licensed and has alt text.
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