Talk:Revolutionary Road (film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Rusted AutoParts 20:54, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

I'll take this one. I was initially looking at improving this article but someone has done so already. Rusted AutoParts 20:54, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

Lead/Infobox

• "The film adaptation began as early as 1961" feels a little awkward as a sentence. Perhaps "Development of a film adaptation of the book first began in 1961" or something under those lines.
• Darien, Connecticut should have the piping removed here so it's just Darien, Connecticut.
  • Y fixed as suggested

Plot

• Plot meets WP:FILMPLOT, all good there.
• "Frank later secures a sales position with Knox Machines, for which his father worked for 20 years, and he and April marry". Is it prudent to include that his father worked there? I don't think his father ever appears in the film nor plays a vital part of the story.
• Should probably try to reduce the amount of sentences in this section. For example, I feel sentences 4 and 5 could be merged.
  • Y removed father bit, merged a few paragraphs

Cast

• The listed names isn't that extensive a cast list, not sure the divided columns are necessary.
  • Y removed third column

Production

• I'm thinking Development and Casting can be just one section. The DiCaprio/Winslet images would feel more in place there than the filming section, and with Casting being too small a section to include an image without bleeding into Filming, the two becoming one feels ideal.
• With the images moved to the above section, perhaps Filming could include an image of Deakins with a blurb about the cinematography of the film.
  • Y merged as suggested, image of Deakins added

Reception

• The top ten lists should have individual sources.
  • Y fixed as suggested

Awards and nominations

• The award ceremonies should be piped to just listed the organization. 81st Academy Awards -> Academy Awards.
• Link Detroit Film Critics Society 2009.
• Missing citations for several awards.
• Link Palm Springs International Film Festival
• A good means to avoid empty space when it comes to the film winning say Best Cast or Best Picture, is to put the film name in As Revolutionary Road for Best Picture, and "The cast of Revolutionary Road" for Cast awards.
  • Y fixed as suggested

References

Thanks for reviewing @Rusted AutoParts: I've made the fixes as appropriate. L150 16:01, 22 September 2020 (UTC)

✓ Pass Rusted AutoParts 19:05, 22 September 2020 (UTC)