Talk:Return of the Obra Dinn/GA1

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 06:27, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Taking a look now....you know the drill...Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:27, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

• If "Memento Mortem" is a foreign phrase...should it not be in italics?
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• As they rowed away, three mermaids attacked the boats and killed several of the group. - the subject changes oddly here - it'd be good to align the subjects between the clauses ahd a go at this myself
  • The game also has quite the tonal shift at this time. I'm not sure how we would reword this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

• to move in a 3D space rewrite as "to move in a three dimensional space" (and link I think?)
  • Added Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• Pope faced preliminary issues at this stage. - this sentence is just sorta plonked there - is a bit vague, can it be removed?
  • Sure, done. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• Any subsequent games cite this as an influence?
  • I haven't come across such a thing, but wouldn't be adverse to adding this if there were games that did.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

A nice read overall. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:40, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

1. Well written?:

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2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:

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3. Broad in coverage?:

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5. Reasonably stable?

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6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

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Pass or Fail: - just minor quibbles really. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:42, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Hi Cas, thanks for the review. Do you mind giving me a couple days to have a chance to look at these points/changes? Should be less than a week. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 06:46, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

no problemo Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:39, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Hi Cas, I've answered all of the above, although some of the points I haven't actioned.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Forgot the ping. Casliber, I've addressed the above. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:43, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

all Good....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:33, 3 September 2021 (UTC)