Talk:Restless Heart/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:18, 27 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 15:54, 25 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copy changes and, hopefully, some newspapers to clip, but that's about it. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 16:31, 25 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

Lead

Stewart departed for a solo career in late 1991 shortly before the band's fifth studio album Big Iron Horses, which featured the other four members alternating lead vocals in his absence I'd add a comma after "album" to complete the appositive, but I also note this article does not always encase album titles in appositives in this situation ("second album Wheels", etc.).

History

Thompson left before the band had officially been named or released a single, because he did not feel comfortable with the country pop style that DuBois wanted the band to pursue. Remove comma; the second half cannot stand alone (User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences, CinS)
Broadcast Music Incorporated should just be Broadcast Music, Inc.
DuBois' should be DuBois's per MOS:'S. I see a couple other errors of this type in this page.
John Wooley of Tulsa World Add "the" before "Tulsa"
It was band's second number-one country hit, and their first song to be successful outside the country music charts. Missing the; remove comma (CinS)
This song had been rejected from the first album, and was originally rejected from Wheels as well, Try This song had been rejected from the first album and had originally been rejected from Wheels,
When was the AllMusic review written? It can't have been contemporary. Maybe "later wrote" instead of "wrote"?
Don't capitalize adult contemporary, but do wikilink it on first mention.
...was later recorded by Ricky Skaggs on his 1989 album Kentucky Thunder, and was a top 20 country hit for him in 1990 Remove comma (CinS)
"early 90s" try "early 1990s"
Wikilink Robert K. Oermann
the Allentown, Pennsylvania Morning Call Needs a GEOCOMMA after Pennsylvania
His debut single "Alright Already" reached number five on the country music charts in 1993 and "I'll Cry Tomorrow" was also a top-40 country hit. Comma needed after 1993 (CinS)
Jennings also noted that Innis wanted to "assume a bigger role" after Stewart's departure, and that there were unsubstantiated rumors among the other band members that Innis was subject to drug and alcohol abuse. Remove comma (CinS)
which they performed in 2003 at the Larry H. Miller Utah Summer Games, This sentence ends in a comma
Lead single "Feel My Way to You" peaked at number 29 on the country music charts, and was the album's only single preceding the closure of Koch Records' Nashville division in 2005 Remove comma; should be "Records's"
Restless Heart was still primarily a touring band throughout the 2010s, and had not released a new album in several years Remove comma
Stewart began recording with The Frontmen in 2018, a group which also includes Richie McDonald of Lonestar and Tim Rushlow of Little Texas Misplaced appositive. Try In 2018, Stewart began recording with The Frontmen, a group which also includes Richie McDonald of Lonestar and Tim Rushlow of Little Texas

Musical stylings

He noted that during showcases for radio representatives early in the band's career, he was often questioned on the band's ability to "duplicate their records live" due to them having been assembled in a studio setting, but felt that live performances were not an issue due to the band having played and sung everything on their debut album without any additional session musicians or studio vocalists. Split this sentence differently: He noted that during showcases for radio representatives early in the band's career, he was often questioned on the band's ability to "duplicate their records live" due to them having been assembled in a studio setting; however, he felt that live performances were not an issue due to the band having played and sung everything on their debut album without any additional session musicians or studio vocalists.
A 1985 article in Billboard wrote that debut single "Let the Heartache Ride" "introduced the band's razor-edged vocal harmonies and scorching instrumentals." and had "bittersweet imagery about quicksilver women." Quoting a sentence fragment? MOS:LOGICAL: periods outside of quotation.
Joe Edwards of the Associated Press noted that the band initially faced resistance due to the lack of traditional country instrumentation such as fiddle and steel guitar, or typical country lyrical content such as heartbreak or consumption of alcohol. This sentence might be easier to process with more commas. Joe Edwards of the Associated Press noted that the band initially faced resistance due to the lack of traditional country instrumentation, such as fiddle and steel guitar, or typical country lyrical content, like heartbreak or consumption of alcohol.

Encouragement: Add captions, even if hidden to most users with {{sronly}}, to the tables for accessibility purposes.

References

This article had 24 unclipped newspapers.com citations. (I will have clipped a few in the spot checking and review process)

Spot checks

7: The entire anecdote checks out to this UPI wire story. Y
25: Soundtrack contribution; lack of fiddle/steel guitar as a perceived issue. Y
44: Assuming good faith on the liner notes. Instead reviewing
- 45: "by-the-book", C grade. Y
54: Dittrich said, "Marc wrote that song five years ago. It was pitched to Restless Heart in the same batch of songs that included 'When She Cries.' I've been to the top with Marc Beeson once, and I knew it had to be an omen." Y
55: Resignation of Dittrich from Buffalo Club. Y
61: Assuming good faith on the offline source. Instead reviewing
- 62: October 2005 article on the folding of Koch Records Nashville. Y
64: Jackson Sun profile mentions the Blue Suede dinner (although I wonder if this is so local it needs a location mention in-text) and the Air Force tours. Y
70: MontanaFest lineup. Y

Images

All images have valid CC licenses or are PD. They even all have alt text.

@Sammi Brie: I just got back home from vacation and I'll take a look at your suggestions over the next day or two. Ten Pound Hammer • ^{(What did I screw up now?)} 23:08, 26 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie: Think I got everything. Note that I have "Adult Contemporary" capitalized when referring to the Billboard chart but lowercase when referring to the genre.

Ten Pound Hammer • ^{(What did I screw up now?)} 16:38, 27 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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