Talk:Reid Nichols/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 20:17, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Technically my 100th review! The count restarted when I changed usernames, but I had 38 on the old one and this is 62! — Ghost River 20:17, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

Add (MLB) after "outfielder and coach in Major League Baseball"
Then "1976 Major League Baseball (MLB) Draft" → "1976 MLB Draft"
"12th Round" → "12th round"
"and he made his MLB debut with them" → "and he debuted with them"
"Nichols became a coach for the Orioles. Doug Melvin worked with Nichols in Baltimore." → "Nichols became a coach for the Orioles, working alongside Doug Melvin."

Early life

"of the Toronto Blue Jays Major League Baseball (MLB) team"
- I don't think this is necessary here. The "Toronto" Blue Jays are obviously from out of town and linked, so I don't think people are going to assume they're a Little League team. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 00:44, 20 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Add (NFL) after "National football League"
"Boston Red Sox scout George Digby" → "George Digby, a scout for the Boston Red Sox" for close para
Link Scout (sports)
"Nichols was selected by the Red Sox" → "the Red Sox selected Nichols" (active voice)
"12th Round" → "12th round"
Remove (MLB) acronym in the middle of the draft WL, since it's now up earlier
"Though he had signed a letter of intent to play baseball" → "Though he had committed to play college baseball"

Minor league career

Hyphen to en dash in New York–Penn League
"(387) at bats" → "(387 at bats)"
In the interest of limiting that Earwig number, the quote about being 18 years old going up against college guys can probably be paraphrased as "Nichols considered Winter Haven a difficult experience: many of his competitors had played college baseball, while he was only 18 years old."

Major league career

Boston Red Sox

"Following Pawtucket's season in 1980," → "When Pawtucket's 1980 season came to an end"
Link "singling" to Single (baseball)
"0 stolen bases" → "no stolen bases"
"centerfield" or "center field"?
- I think either is correct, but I just changed them to be all the same. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:13, 20 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Specify his first major league regular season homer, since he had one during spring training
"5 stolen bases" → "five stolen bases" per MOS:NUM
Spaces around ellipses in the quote with "We've got a good outfield", per MOS:ELLIPSIS
Change parentheses to commas around "usually when Armas was serving as the designated hitter"
WL pinch hitter
Is it possible to expand on that almost-trade to the Yanks?
"every out field position" → "every outfield position"
"3 runs scored, 6 hits, 1 home run, 3 RBI, and 1 stolen base" → "three runs scored, six hits, one home run, three RBI, and one stolen base" per MOS:NUM

Chicago White Sox

"1 home run, 15 RBI, and 5 stolen bases" → "one home run, 15 RBI, and five stolen bases" per MOS:NUM

Montreal Expos

"In 1987, Nichols competed for a roster spot but was released by the White Sox at the end of spring training, on March 30." → "Nichols spent spring training in 1987 competing for a spot on the White Sox' roster, but was released on March 30." to fix close paraphrasing
"Four days later, he was signed by the Montreal Expos.[1] The team signed him because they had been unable to come to a deal with star outfielder Tim Raines." → "Four days later, he was signed by the Montreal Expos, who were in need of another outfielder after failing to come to terms with Tim Raines."

Texas Rangers organization

I found a great piece here about his time in OKC
This also talks about his '88 season
And, per this article, Nichols signed with the Cubs for a potential '89 bid but chose to retire instead

Career statistics

Good

Post playing career

"Initially after retiring, Nichols earned his charter boat license and captained fishing tours. "When you own your own business, the customer is the boss and that is a lot of pressure," he concluded, deciding to go back into baseball." → "After his retirement, Nichols earned his charter boat license and captained fishing tours, but he chose to return to baseball because, "When you own your own business, the customer is the boss and that is a lot of pressure.""
Nichols remained with the Orioles through the 1993 season. Doesn't indicate earlier that he was hired by the Orioles; section actually implies he returned to Chicago
"Ranger's GM" → "Rangers' GM"
I believe farm director is a lowercase title
"Rangers first base" → "Rangers' first base"
"etiquette and financial literacy. It involved actors role-playing common scenarios that a rookie might encounter." → "etiquette and financial literacy, having actors role-play common scenarios that a rookie might encounter."
Mention what age he was when he retired

Personal life

"From a previous marriage, he has three daughters: Amanda, Erin, and Kendall." → "He has three daughters from a previous marriage: Amanda, Erin, and Kendall."
- Reorganized section a little more chronologically.
It looks like Kendall played college volleyball at Liberty!
It also looks like his first wife's name was Janet, and Amanda was born on July 17, 1982
- The Oklahoman article also had Janet's name - nice job finding it twice! I'd put in Amanda's birthdate, only since we don't know the birthdates of the other daughters, it might make more sense not to include that. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:42, 20 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"His hobbies are" → "His hobbies include"

References

In [35], "SPORTS OF THE TIMES" should be in title case, per MOS:ALLCAPS
In [38], "Baseball Prospectus" should be the work, not the publisher (the publisher is technically DIY Baseball LLC)

General comments

Both photos are properly licensed and relevant
The fixed image size on the thumbnails should be removed per MOS:IMGSIZE
The Fenway Park caption should have a period per MOS:CAPTION
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig score is very high. Some of this falls within WP:LIMITED, some is lots of direct quoting, and some can be rephrased.

Putting on hold for now, feel free to ping me with any questions. — Ghost River 14:15, 19 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, Earwig score is still a little high, but it's all attributed direct quotes, and I don't think there are any that I would swap out or paraphrase besides the one already noted, so I'm content to give this a pass (even if this is the man responsible for creating my old nemesis, Ryan Braun). — Ghost River 01:11, 21 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]