Talk:Rei I/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 14:13, 3 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there. I'll be reviewing this article. Considering its length I'm pretty sure it will be fast.Tintor2 (talk) 14:13, 3 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Everything seems well written. However, the second paragraph seems small in comparison to how big is production and cultural themes. It might be good to expand such paragraph with a brief intro.

Plot

Shinji Ikari is not introduced or wikilinked.
"Rei doesn't flinch and ignores her colleague when he tries to strike up a conversation with her." It seems the more appropiate form for the encyclopedia is using "does not" instead of "doesn't" similar for writing formal letters.
"The girl is subjected to a new test with Eva-00, which is interrupted by an attack by a new enemy, the fifth Angel Ramiel." It might be good to specify it is Rei although I think she is the only female character in this episode besides Misato and Ritsuko.

Production

"Once the first part of Shinji's emotional journey was over in the fourth episode" Emotional journey seems unfitting. I would suggest something like "Shinji's emotions were followed through the first four episode".
"di lei"? I'm kinda confused there. You mean that Italian word?
Wikilink Misato and Ritsuko

Cultural references, style and themes

"and jumping like a girl in love" From what I get phrasal verbs should not be used.
The third paragraph is quite big. I'd suggest splitting it.

Reception

PenPen's mention is kinda out of place in the middle of commentary about Rei and her relationships. Move it to another paragraph or sentence.

@TeenAngels1234: Other than that everything else is okay. I added the dates template at the top to make the references consistent when mentioning dates. Revise this and I'll pass the review. Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 16:49, 3 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Tintor2: Thank you. Tried my best.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 21:01, 3 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Good work. You did every change. I'm passing the review. Keep up the good work.Tintor2 (talk) 22:32, 3 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]