Talk:Reel Moments/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk · contribs) 01:39, 3 December 2011 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: none found.

Linkrot: one found and tagged.[1] Jezhotwells (talk) 01:45, 3 December 2011 (UTC)

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Objectives of the project include empowering women by producing female-friendly short films while creating opportunities for actresses to direct and extending the Glamour brand This is ungrammatical, "while creating opportunities for actresses to direct and extending the Glamour brand" confuses the subjects of the sentence. Please rewrite.

   She also, co-wrote the film. Why the comma?

   was received so well that she parlayed the experience into a directing role poor word choice

   Carol Leifer was the final director of Blinders So who was the first director?

   the films were also produced by a woman from Moxie Pictures in Los Angeles. Who?

   Wilson sings the closing track in her film. change of tense here, be consistent.

   The films were debuted at ?? "debuted at" or "were premiered at"

   Why do we jump from 2008 to 2010? What happened in 2009?

   The films debuted at the Directors Guild Theater on October 25, 2010 with Weisz in absentia "in absentia" Please? Are you tring to impress by using words you don't understand?

   included a cast of Christina Ricci, Daniel Stern, Kathy Najimy and Troy Garity "included a cast of"?

   Other volunteer actors include Justin Long, Aziz Azari, and Jaclyn Jonet. Change of tense

   The shorts, that fall under the year's theme of empowering women to feel beautiful, will open on October 24 at the Director's Guild Theater and be available on glamourreelmoments.com the following day. That was six weeks ago. Did it happen?

   Organization is poor, the article consists mainly of badly written statements thrown together, with no structure or flow. No critical comment, no reception.

   Lead does not summarize the article, see WP:LEAD.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   One dead link as noted above.

   Sources appear reliable, no evidence of OR

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Organization is poor, the article consists mainly of statements thrown together, lots of trivia, with no structure or flow. No critical comment, no reception.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   NPOV

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   stable

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   A surfeit of images which appear to be eye candy, without adding any extra content.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   A rough first draft but nowhere near GA standard. Not listed. Jezhotwells (talk) 02:20, 3 December 2011 (UTC)

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