Talk:Redrum (Era Istrefi song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Sebbirrrr (talk · contribs) 20:55, 17 May 2022 (UTC)
Hi there! I'll be taking this article for review. I'll leave comments soon.
Infobox
[edit]Add alt text for the cover
Lead
[edit]"English-language" seems unnecessary"focusing on the concept materialism" → "focusing on the concept of materialism"- "Istrefi's appeareance" → what does appearance refer to here?
- Removed. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:42, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
"the song attained success" → "attained success" seems unnecessary since the song only charted on three charts"topping the charts in Albania" → "peaked at number one in Albania""reaching the top 50 in the Commonwealth of Independent States (CIS) and the United States" → "reached the top 30 in the Commonwealth of Independent States (CIS) and the top 50 on Billboard's Dance/Electronic Songs"
Background and composition
[edit]Link BonBon and add its release year in brackets"premiered for digital download and streaming" → "was released for digital download and streaming""It was written by Istrefi, David Singer and William Vanderhayden, while produced by Felix Snow and Mark Ralph." → "Istrefi wrote it with David Singer and William Vanderhayden, while Felix Snow and Mark Ralph produced it.""she knows the relationship has many deficits" → "she knows the relationship is deficient"Add a period after the last lyric
Reception
[edit]"Upon its release" → remove "its""of V Magazine" → "of V" and link V to V (American magazine)"As of Beautiful Buzzz's" → "According to Beautiful Buzzz's"Ref 8 says "killer aesthetic" instead of "murderous aesthetic"- Where does Ref 9 compliment Istrefi's fashion?
- I may have got mixed up, removed. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:42, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
"similarly complimented the singer's fashion" → "expressed a similar opinion regarding the singer's fashion""on the last issue of the country's Top 100 chart for the week ending on 12 March 2017" → this reads awkward, I'm confused by what "last issue" is supposed to mean
Music video
[edit]"was hired for the shooting, for which Millicent Hailes was credited as the director" → "was hired for the shooting of the video, while Millicent Hailes directed it"Barbera and Krask's roles don't seem worth mentioning"in a smoky-surrounding and red-colored setting" → "in a red-color setting surrounded by smoke""Generally viewed positively by reviewers," → "The video was received positively by reviewers.""V Magazine's Truman Ports" → change to "Ports" since you already mentioned the publication the author is writing for and their full name"Currinn from Critic Jonni" → same thing as above
Track listing
[edit]- Everything is alright here
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Everything is alright here
Charts
[edit]- Everything is alright here
Release history
[edit]Add a couple more Apple Music links for "Various" as you've only added one, which is from Kosovo
References
[edit]- Copyvio score at 29.6%, most of it being the song's lyrics but it's still good
For ref 3, add how users can view the credits as they are not visible from first sightFor ref 4, replace "V magazine" with just "V" and link it to V (American magazine)- What makes ref 7 reliable?
- The website seem to be quite allowable and uptodate, there also few sources which review the song. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:50, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
Outcome
[edit]- On hold for 7 days until all issues are fixed! Sebbirrrr (talk) 22:43, 17 May 2022 (UTC)
- Hey @Sebbirrrr:, I've adressed your comments and thank you a lot for the review. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:50, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
- @Iaof2017: You're welcome. Everything is alright now so I'm passing
- Hey @Sebbirrrr:, I've adressed your comments and thank you a lot for the review. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:50, 18 May 2022 (UTC)