Talk:Red Lips (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 14:24, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

So we meet again... I will be conducting the review for "Red Lips". :) prism △ 14:24, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

General overview

Disambiguation links

• According to Dablinks, there are none in this page.

External links

• According to Checklinks, there is one page that is described as truncating its link; and four others that are dead. (here)

•  Done; it looks like they changed the listings on Amazon.com right after I included the original citations.

Original research and reliable sources

• "This concept is referenced throughout the chorus, where the lines "Such a big girl / such big news / such a big talk / your number is up / if you like it or not" are delivered.[10]" → MetroLyrics is not a suitable reference for this, as it just displays the lyrics. Your assumption of those lyrics being a reference to the previously addressed concept is your opinion, so this has to either be removed or proved.

• I reworded that piece to simply say that those are the words that she sings during the chorus, but I'm wondering if that statement is even necessary for the article. You can go ahead and remove it completely if you'd like.

Prose

Lead

• "which was deliberately done in avoidance of being branded in a similar fashion as recording artist Britney Spears." → this is unclear to whether it's talking about the song being branded or the artist herself being branded as Spears. Maybe reword a bit?

•  Done

Background and composition

• This part of the article (composition) is a bit empty. Maybe you could try and find some more information on the reviews section.

•  Done

Critical reception

• Consequence of Sound can be wikilinked.

•  Done

References

• FN15 — should have |people=(director)|format=Music video parameters.

•  Done

Other suggestions

• You can add to the article that Com Truise remixed the song, which is already referenced in FN8.

•  Done

• Here's another review of Ghost that references "Red Lips", and it's from MuuMuse (here) prism △ 14:24, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

•  Done