Talk:Red-tailed tropicbird

GA Review

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 23:21, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

• I'll take this one. As usual, I have some preliminary image suggestions first. FunkMonk (talk) 23:21, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

I might be going back to Norfolk Island for work in April...I was surprised by how large they were, and pretty tame too. So might be able to get some more photos. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:09, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• If available, I think we should always show all growth stages and plumage variations. You don't show the downy chick, though Commons has a category full of it:[1]

added (and extra egg photo removed) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:28, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

• Since you have the room, it could be nice to show a close up of the head of this bird.

added. Am tempted to swap the head shot into the taxobox as then it faces into the page, as does the flying bird if I place it at the left of the article under description section. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:28, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

I think it's always best to show the entire subject in the taxobox. FunkMonk (talk) 15:29, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• You mention that crazy ants are a threat, why not show this photo[2] then of a bird under attack?

added...but I think the licence is not good - it says non commerical use on flickr :( Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:57, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

It has to be fine since it is a US government work, thereby being in the public domain. RileyBugz^{私に叫ぼう}_私の編集 18:30, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

Yeah, I think you can point that out during FACm but the image deswcription on COmmons could probably clarify it has a kind of invalid licence on Flckr. FunkMonk (talk) 15:29, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• You don't present all writers in the same way.

added intros Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:57, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

• The caption to the taxobox image does not need italics, and instead of redundantly listing the name, you could list the location.

tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:28, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

• No range map?

tricky - we didn't for other...but might be good range map done now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:57, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

• The image you have of a nesting individual says "possibly on a nest" on Commons. Perhaps find one that is more certain.[3]

images changed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:38, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• He also reported a black-billed tropicbird" Why no link? Also goes for silver gull and perhaps other species mentioned.

links added. black-billed tropicbird is merely immature this species Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:38, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• You should be consistent in whether you list the scientific names of other mentioned species or not.

added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:38, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

The ant could need it too. FunkMonk (talk) 03:40, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "a nomen nudum" Link.

added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:38, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• "distinct form that he named P. rubicauda erubescens" Surely a subspecies?

tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:38, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• "The Maori called it amokura, tawake, ko’ae or ’ula,[11] while the Hawaiians call it" Links for the peoples?

linked now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:32, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

• " the IOC" Link and spell out at first occurrence.

done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:15, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "in flight, Kilauea Point", "closeup of head". Capitalise first letters in captions?

Capped Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:39, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• "are mostlyfeathered" Split?

Split Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:39, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

• "The large range and apparently stable population indicate that the red-tailed tropicbird is classified as a least-concern species according to the IUCN" That is a very strange way to put it. It doesn't indicate anything, it is the reason it is classified as such.

tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:56, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "Feral dogs and cats on nesting birds on Christmas Island" Verb missing?

added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:56, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "but always high than the air temperature" Higher.

tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:56, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• I think the word "although" is used at an unnecessarily high degree throughout.

got rid of a couple, although hard to remove in contrastive clauses Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:09, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "bimodality" Explain.

they either go on short or long foraging trips with no in between lengths. If you can think of an equally succinct way to say it I am all ears. Also there is a nice picture at the top of the target article. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:09, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "and members of the genus Cypselurus) prominent" Why the half parenthesis?

error - removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:09, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "though is adversely affected by human contact." It is?

tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:09, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "Most adults have red tail streamers" Some don't?

removed "most" - they do unless moutling or something Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:09, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• "They adopt a defence posture" Why italics?

it's a specific thing

• "Mate choice is likely to be partially based on the length of the tail streamers" Mutual sexual selection?

linked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:14, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

• Alright, not much more to do now than pass and send it to FAC! FunkMonk (talk) 15:23, 26 February 2018 (UTC)