Talk:Rebel Heart Tour/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 17:55, 26 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

It was officially announced → Change "It" to "The tour" to avoid repetition
as well films like 300 (2006) → as well as by films like 300 (2006)
Madonna's career with songs from Rebel Heart. → Madonna's career along with material from Rebel Heart
The tour grossed $169.8 million → replace "The tour" with "Rebel Heart Tour" to avoid repetition
This ranked her in third on the → This ranked her in third place on the

Infobox

Image needs alternative text describing what the viewer can see in the picture

Background

eastern Asia → Eastern Asia
Link hacker
throughout Europe and end → add a comma before "and"
of the postponement and the first date → of the postponement and announced that the first date
According to Billboard, Rebel Heart → leaving the "Tour" out could lead to confusions, so I would stick with it

Development

Conception and rehearsals

While composing Rebel Heart → While composing material for Rebel Heart
Madonna admitted liking the rehearsals and the creative process during a tour, since she could be in her casual cloths and not bother about her looks, just be engrossed in the development → Madonna admitted liking the tour's rehearsals and creative process, noting her involvance in its development
work behind the scenes of Rebel Heart Tour → work behind the scenes of the Rebel Heart Tour
Madonna was still working on the set list → you don't need the "still"
However, picking the set list was hard since the singer wanted to perform songs from Rebel Heart as well as her previous discography. It was challenging since "thematically the songs → Madonna saw a challenge in alternating between material from Rebel Heart and her previous works, since "thematically..."
representing a journey with her personal statements and opinions. → don't really know what you mean by this
as well as films like 300 → as well as from films like 300
and dance-forms that would inspire the audience → and dance routines that would appeal to the audience
was hired during the dancer auditions → was hired for the auditions to select backup dancers for the show
Madonna liked her work and enlisted to choreograph two songs for the show → I guess something's missing here, as it does not make any sense
come up with the execution → I feel like "routines" would be better here instead of "the execution"
flamenco inspired choreography → flamenco-inspired choreography
DJ → write out to disc jockey
She thought it would be interesting since she believed → The singer thought of the idea since she believed
as opening act → as the opening act

Stage and venue setup

They started and brainstorming → no need for the "and"
with the heart at the tip → with the heart at its tip (for clarification)
Behind the main stage three large video → comma before "three"
within half-a-minute → within half a minute
The screen showed the visuals by Moment → The screen showed visuals created by Moment
Although not recommended to use steel because of its heavy weight and enormity → Although it was not recommended to use the steel because of its heavy weight and enormity
which was about 6 feet (1.8 m) tall only → remove "only"
along with lots of flowers → along with several flowers
After the final performance, the singer left the venue directly from the stage to her hotel → This is really irrelevant here and can be removed

Costume design

to Women's Wear Daily. They include → connect this sentence to: "to Women's Wear Daily; they include"
black and fuchsia colored jacket → black and fuchsia-colored jacket
and jacquard bodysuit → and a jacquard bodysuit
Phillips was impressed with the dress saying → comma before "saying"
Madonna worked with Scott and wanted → Madonna worked with Scott and desired
and the choreography was 100% finalized → and the choreography was fully finalized
Madonna did not gave a final sign → Madonna did not give a final sign
Thumbnail > geisha inspired performance → geisha-inspired performance

Multimedia and videos

Montreal based multimedia company → Montreal-based multimedia company
confinement, love, sex, violence among others → confinement, love, sex and violence, among others
The idea for using fan artwork during the "Rebel Heart" song grew from this. → The idea of using fan artwork during performances of "Rebel Heart" emerged from this thought
and they were displayed as a live digital gallery → with them displayed as a live digital gallery
Many layering and rendering → Several layering and rendering
Different multimedia software were used to create the clips, like → Different multimedia software were used to create the clips, including

Light and sound

sitting on the side areas.. → there's one full stop too much
That way one need not have full knowledge about the physical stage → This sentence is quite irrelevant and is already included in "relevant personnel"; remove this
During the show the singer ventured → comma after "show"

Concert synopsis

large gold pikes, came out onto the catwalk → large gold pikes; they came out onto the catwalk
were dressed as pole dancing nuns accompanied her → were dressed as pole dancing nuns and accompanied her
dancers waving large white cloths in front of fans → dancers wavied large white cloths in front of the audience
The album track "Messiah" played as scenes from the "Ghosttown" music video played on the screens → The album track "Messiah" played while scenes from the "Ghosttown" music video were shown on the screens
where eight dancers portrayed sexual positions → where eight dancers enacted sexual positions
The title track closed → The album's title track + unlink it here and link it at the end of the "Multimedia and video" section
climbed 20 feet poles → climbed 20-feet poles
A slowed down version of "Material Girl" → A slowed-down version of "Material Girl"
Unlink "Material Girl", as mentioned before already
terming the person with the titular name → terming the person with their titular name
the banana part was quite funny actually, btw...

Commercial reception

Ticket sales

with the top price in $300–$350 range → with the top price in the $300–$350 range
secondary markets indicated that it would become → secondary markets indicated that Rebel Heart Tour would become (for clarification)
than singer Taylor Swift's → you don't need "singer" here
The show of October 24 at Las Vegas became the most expensive date with average price → The show of October 24 in Las Vegas became the most expensive date with an average price
Tickets for the shows started selling out fast → Tickets for the shows started selling out rapidly
sold out within minutes after going on sale → sold out within minutes after of availability
and finally general public → and ultimately general public
concert in Taiwan sold out in 15 minutes prompting → comma before "prompting"
a record for the fastest selling → a record for the fastest-selling

Boxscore

with total gross of $3.4 million → with a total gross of $3.4 million
drew a total of 40,557 audience → drew a total of 40,557 in audience
the tour placed at number 11 → the tour was placed at number 11
were published on March 2016 → were published in March 2016
the tour ranked at number four, grossing $85.5 million → the tour was ranked at number four, grossing $85.5 million
is ranked third on all-time top-grossing Billboard Boxscore list → is ranked third on the all-time top-grossing Billboard Boxscore list

Critical response

North America

Unlink "Billboard" in the last paragraph
I didn't find any other mistake here

Europe

attended the show at Stockholm → attended the show in Stockholm
and declared it as better than the MDNA Tour → and called it superior to the MDNA Tour
but was complimentary about the ending of the show, and the messages of love and positivism → comma before "and" is not needed
referring to her falling down at the Brit Awards 2015. → referencing her falling down at the Brit Awards 2015.
Unlink "The Guardian", as mentioned before
Unlink "Deeper and Deeper" for similar reasons
Mark Savage noted that the show's strongest moments come when Madonna → Mark Savage noted that its strongest moments came when Madonna

Asia and Oceania

and the crowd → and observed that the crowd
Everything else is on point here

Controversies

Thumbnail > flag of the country she was performing at → flag of the country she was performing in
Her appearance at Manchester attracted → Her appearance in Manchester attracted
many of the concertgoers → several of the attenders
of a 17-year old girl → of a 17-year old woman
Georgiou, on stage by pulling down her top → remove comma

Recording and broadcast

behind the scenes → behind-the-scenes
The cover image was photographed by fashion photographer Joshua Brandão → This sentence should be removed alltogether, as it's not relevant in any way to the tour article

Notes

a) At Stockholm → In Stockholm

External links

at the Madonna official website → on Madonna's official website

Outcome

@IndianBio: Hi there! I'm very surprised by the fact that you've implemented so many comments from the last GAN I've conducted, bringing the article in a very good shape. Reading through it was considerably easier than a few months ago. Little more has to be adressed before I can promote this and you can nominate the whole Rebel Heart topic for GT. I'm placing this On hold for 7 days in order to allow you to adress the ramaining issues. Best of regards and good luck; Cartoon network freak (talk) 00:19, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- @Cartoon network freak: I have addressed all comments and I'm done with the article. Please check and see. :) Thanks for the wonderful review comments. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 17:00, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Gladly passing this, as all issues from this and the first GAN have been adressed. Also, good luck with promoting the Rebel Heart topic! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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