Talk:Real and True/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 19:09, 19 January 2014 (UTC)

I can't say I'm a fan of the artists, but I'm happy to provide a review. J Milburn (talk) 19:09, 19 January 2014 (UTC)

• A1 Records and Honest are both worth redlinks, surely?

 Done

• Just a note, and I've changed it in the article; the phrase "lyrically describe" would generally mean "describe in a lyrical way".

Thanks!

• "Future and Cyrus had first collaborated on the track "My Darlin'" for Cyrus' fourth studio album Bangerz (2013).[2] The track's lyrics" Are you talking about "My Darlin'" or "Real and True" here?

"My Darlin'", and it appears that that piece has been clarified before I got to this review.

• "the hook" is a bit jargony

 Done

• "After its completion"; what do you mean by "its"? You could probably just lose these three words

 Done

• "additionally, Cyrus and Mr Hudson helped to co-write the song" What did they write? I'm not clear on this. You could perhaps phrase it as something like "According to [whoever], Future wrote the remaining verses to compliment the contributions of Cyrus and Mr Hudson,[1] though the two received credits for being co-writers.[5]"

 Done

• "while Alex Young of Consequence of Sound commended the recording as a feel good love song highlighted by an impressive hook"," Where does the quote start?

 Done

• The rationale on File:RealAndTrueMusicVideo.jpg is a little weak.

 Removed

• "commenting "clothes or no clothes, Liam Hemsworth's ex-lady looks and sounds incredible"." What does this mean? If it's referring to Cyrus, how about "commenting "clothes or no clothes", Cyrus "looks and sounds incredible"." or "commenting "clothes or no clothes, [Cyrus] looks and sounds incredible"."

 Done, I included the third option in the article.

• "A writer for The Huffington Post described the concept as "appropriately futuristic visuals" given the intergalactic-themed nature of the lyrics.[18]" Could this be rephrased? It's a little clumsy as is

 Done, although I'm not sure how much more I like my adjustment. If you can think of anything better, by all means go ahead and correct it!

• Was this never released as a CD single?

Unfortunately not.

The sources all look good. This is a decent article, a lot better than a lot of similar articles I've seen at GAC, and I've no doubt that, with a couple of small fixes, this'll be ready for GA status. The only (small) worry I have is that you may need to expand it when Honest comes out and some new reviews surface. J Milburn (talk) 19:40, 19 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks so much for your review! WikiRedactor (talk) 15:06, 20 January 2014 (UTC)

I'm very happy with the fixes you've made, and I'm now going to promote the article. Great work! J Milburn (talk) 16:03, 20 January 2014 (UTC)

Thank you so much! WikiRedactor (talk) 16:14, 20 January 2014 (UTC)