Talk:Real Friends (Camila Cabello song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:39, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

It was written by Cabello, William Walsh, Louis Bell, Brian Lee and its producer Frank Dukes. It was released as a promotional single along with "Never Be the Same" on December 7, 2017 an instant gratification track to accompany the digital pre-orders of the album. → Written by Cabello, William Walsh, Louis Bell, Brian Lee and its producer Frank Dukes, it was released as a promotional single on December 7, 2017 to accompany the digital pre-orders of the record. (to avoid repetition of words; you don't need that much detail on the release in the lead)
"Real Friends" is musically soft with an acoustic guitar as its foundation, it finds Cabello reflecting about her life while asking for an honest friendship. → "Real Friends" has been musically described as soft, with an acoustic guitar used as its foundation. Its lyrics find Cabello reflecting about her life while asking for an honest friendship.
Its calm production draws from reggae and Latin and tropical music genres. → The song's minimalistic production draws elements from reggae, Latin and tropical music genres.
of the Los Angeles City → "City" is superfluous
in which Cabello felt annoyed about when she was finishing the recording sessions for the album → which Cabello felt annoyed about when she was finishing the recording sessions for the album there
group Fifth Harmony. However, Cabello denied these → group Fifth Harmony; Cabello denied these
who complimented the soft acoustic sound in which it was built around while praised the performer's vocals → who complimented its soft acoustic sound and Cabello's vocals

Done

Infobox

I don't see "Acoustic-pop" to be cited anywhere in the article's body, so that needs to be removed

Background and release

and Brian Lee while production was handled by Dukes himself → and Brian Lee, while production was solely handled by Dukes
finishing her solo debut album, Camila (2018) unsatisfied with the city, and its industrialist environment → finishing her solo debut album, Camila (2018). Unsatisfied with the city and its industrialist environment,...
This unconformity, made Cabelo wonders how "tired" she was at that moment, inspiring her to create a song which she could express her thoughts and emotions, giving life to "Real Friends" through its chorus. → Please remove this whole sentence, as it is kind of the same information as in the prior sentence
The last song created for the album, "Real Friends" was at → The last song created for the album, "Real Friends" was recorded at
in Virginia Beach, Virginia, by Serban → remove second comma
Image > in the district of Hollywood → we can't find this information in the article's body
Image > when she was annoyed about the city's industrialist environment and "small things" that was happening in her life. → when she was annoyed about the city's industrialist environment and reflected about her life.

Done

Composition and lyrics

and additionally, a lone handclap → and a lone handclap
In contrast to the song's soft melody, the verses are sung calmly → How is "soft" a contrast to "calmly"?
Cabello using low register → Cabello using her low register
while vulnerably asks → while vulnerably asking
It's most evident during chorus, in which she sings → Lyrics from the chorus include: (it's very much of your own opinion when you say "it's most evident")
Its sound also exhibits influences of tropical, reggae and Latin music.[11][12][13] It has a length of three minutes and thirty-three seconds. → Having a length of three minutes and 33 seconds, its sound also exhibits influences of tropical, reggae and Latin music.[11][12][13]

Done

Reception

Sam Warner from Digital Spy is an example, he said → Sam Warner from Digital Spy wrote (you don't need the "is an example part")
Alex Petridis analyzed the lyrics saying that sounds like it’s dealing with → Similarly, Alex Petridis analyzed the lyrics, speculating that they discuss on
affirmating → affirming
the song does not refers → the song was not referring
well received → well-received
music journalists → music critics
described it as most sparest in comparison to her previously released tracks. → described it as Cabello's most sparest song in comparison to her past work.
For Variety's Staff → Accordin to Variety's staff
acoustic ballad "All These Years" describing them as "stunning" → acoustic ballad "All These Years" ~~describing them~~ as "stunning",
track "Consequences" writing that both "pretty" ballads showcase her vocals → track "Consequences" ~~writing that both~~ as "pretty" ballads that showcase her vocals
due to positive digital downloads → digital downloads can't be positive; remove "positive"
It debuted at top hundred in Canada → It debuted within the top 100 in Canada
it reached top forty in several other → it reached the top 40 in several other regions
six on Bubbling Under Hot 100– a component that lists → six on the Bubbling Under Hot 100, a component chart that lists

Done

Credits and personnel

The following credits were adapted from the liner notes → Credits adapted from the liner notes
Link the locations in "Recording"

Done

Charts

All seems on point here ;)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

91.6% is WAY too heavy! It seems like your text is very similar to that on camilacabello.wikia.com/wiki/Real_Friends
Wait, this is really weird. I swear that I haven't copied anything from this alternative Wikipedia, I've written it by myself. I remember the last time I checked this copy-violation it was less than 25%. What now? –UrbanJE (talk) 10:52, 22 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry to interrupt, but it could be a mirror website or someone that copy-and-pasted the information from Wikipedia to that site. Aoba47 (talk) 16:42, 22 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

If you see the edit history on the other wiki (here), a majority of the information was added on February 21, which supports that it was taken from Wikipedia. Aoba47 (talk) 16:45, 22 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article (I can't verify the books, so I trust you with this!)
Avoid SHOUTING in ref no.1

Fixed

Outcome

@UrbanJE: This is my review! There are some things to fix, but I think you can bring it to GA soon... Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:30, 22 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Cartoon network freak: All concerns have been addressed, thank you so much for spending your time reviewing the article. You're incredible –UrbanJE (talk) 12:36, 22 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@UrbanJE: Many thing you said were done were indeed not. Please implement my comments or specify why you think they are not appropriate. Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:56, 24 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Hey @Cartoon network freak: I'm sorry, I have addressed your concerns however someone reverted the editions in the lead, I've fixed yesterday but still there were some other points that I didn't perceive. Thanks for noticing me! –UrbanJE (talk) 13:38, 24 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@UrbanJE: I have requested a copy-edit... Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:43, 24 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Cartoon network freak: Copy-edit completed, thank you so, so, so much for this request, it helped a lot. I actually didn't have time to post something about your request before, I'm sorry for this inactivity. I guess it sounded like I didn't care, but I do (dgmw haha). –UrbanJE (talk) 20:17, 28 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Gladly passing this! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:02, 3 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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