Talk:Raymond Pace Alexander/GA2

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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 23:13, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Review

Will review this article. It looks ripe for promotion already, but I'll try to be as thorough as possible. Stay tuned. MX (✉ • ✎) 23:14, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, this article is excellently written. I enjoyed it a lot. Below are a few issues / suggestions before passing this nomination. Thank you! MX (✉ • ✎) 03:05, 14 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Early life and education

Later, looking back on his time at the Met – Is the "Met" an official acronym of the Metropolitan Opera House? If not, I would suggest adding a ( ) after Metropolitan Opera House and using the shorter version later.

Alexander attended the University of Pennsylvania on a merit scholarship and became the first black graduate of the Wharton School of Business in 1920. – Link both schools

(As he was not yet barred, Alexander hired an attorney to represent him.) – I think this would work without parenthesis.

Legal career

a white Republican former Congressman with a small office in the city – I would link Republican for those non-American readers unfamiliar with the word.

After she was convicted and sentenced to death – Just a suggestion, but how do you feel about linking sentenced to death with "Capital punishment in Pennsylvania"?

joined the National Bar Association, an association ... – Add (NBA) after National Bar Association since it is used later.

Though the NBA, Alexander began – Misspelled; should be "Through".

Berwyn desegregation case

Schnader, now running for governor, now promised to find a solution – using "now" twice sounds a bit awkward. Consider rephrasing.

Growing prestige

the country at National Bar Association events – I would stick with the acronym NBA, per above.

would not receive a fair trial in the South – link fair trial

Trenton Six

Trenton police induced confessions from five of the six – link Trenton police

the legal arm of the communist party – Which community party? Can we link it too?

In 1949, the New Jersey Supreme Court granted the men – link to Supreme Court of New Jersey

prohibited the CRC from representing – Add (CRC) after the Civil Rights Congress mention in the previous sentences

himself from the CLC and other communist groups – Not sure what CLC is since this acronym was not mentioned earlier.

Seeking judicial nomination

At that time, Republicans dominated Philadelphia's political scene – Unlink Republican here since you will be linking it above, per WP:OVERLINK

Sadie Alexander had followed her husband's political shift – Shouldn't it be "Mossell", as used in earlier paragraphs?

President Harry S. Truman appointed her to his Committee on Civil Rights – If it hasn't been linked before, please link the article: President's Committee on Civil Rights

the school would eventually desegregate – tidy it up to "the school eventually desegregated"

City Council

He won reelection in 1955 with an – I think the right way to say it is "He won the reelection ..."

While there, Alexander continued – While where? It's a bit unclear.

found the required two-thirds vote in Council to make it on to the ballot for popular approval – Feel free to put 2⁄3 if you'd like

Judge

demanded that a grand jury be convened to investigate Democratic corruption in City Hall – What is "City Hall"? Is that another way of saying local / city government?

Meanwhile, he spoke out against black separatism, calling it "reverse racism." – link black separatism; could be an interesting read

Sources

All checks out. Sources are reliable, formatted properly, etc. I have a question, however. Why is Source #21 not formatted the same way at the bottom like the others?

Infobox

Have you considered adding one? I think it would be a value-added for our readers.

- @MX: Thank you for the thorough review. My changes are here, and should address your concerns. The only one I left out, I think, was referring to Sadie Alexander as "Mossell" after her marriage. I think that since she changed her name, we should reintroduce her that way. Everything else, I think, is as you've suggested. --Coemgenus (talk) 21:22, 14 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. This article passes. Congratulations! MX (✉ • ✎) 22:45, 14 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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