Talk:Randy Rhoads/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: MisterCake (talk · contribs) 21:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | The lead is a bit short. 4 paragraphs is usually what's expected. While perhaps his early death can make it shorter, not that short. |
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | Youtube videos might not be the best |
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2c. it contains no original research. | Self published source. |
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | |
| 3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | |
| 6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | Be nice to have a few more images. Unfortunate no polka dot guitar ones. Added Alice Cooper and Ozzy and guitar. |
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7. Overall assessment. | Could get to GA but takes work and the nominator is MIA. Feel free to nominate again with improvements. |
- " DuBrow was an L.A. photographer who was not at all what Rhoads had in mind for his new band, and he was not well liked by his Quiet Riot bandmates, a situation that caused a great deal of tension within the band." A bit confusing, as he's not in the band yet, and "not at all" may get into editorializing.
- Surely more to say about Mr. Crowley and Crazy Train. Also nice if explain the relevance of Ozzy's quote.
- Nothing to cite from McIver or Rosens books?
- Footnote 25 needs page numbers.
- "Sarzo, Rudy (2017). Off the Rails " appears to be self published. If so, that cant be used. One should find alternative sources for those claims, and put the book in a further reading section
- Nice to archive every source you can.
Status query
[edit]MisterCake, I note that SolarFlash, who nominated the article, has not edited on Wikipedia since August 29, over three months ago and before you opened this review. The vast majority of the clean-up work on the article since the review opened has been done by you. Are you planning on continuing working on the article until you think it's ready to pass? If so, it would be a good idea to get a second opinion before you pass it, to be sure you haven't overlooked anything—it's easier to miss issues with your own edits or revised prose than it is in someone else's wording. Thanks for all the work you've done so far! BlueMoonset (talk) 05:46, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
- Yes, I probably have to fail it soon. No, I wasn't planning on doing all the work to fix it to GA status - would have to find sources where it uses youtube, etc, that I'm not prepared to do. But I did try to improve it. Cake (talk) 08:20, 2 December 2020 (UTC)