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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:02, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "At the time the structure was built to be one..." maybe "At the time the structure was built, it was one"?


  • " of the best " what does this mean? By what measure?


  • "had been destroyed by fire." sounds like they both went up at the same time, perhaps clarify that.


  • "facility has a history of productions of various plays" this seems like saying "the pub has a history of serving beer".


  • "Building Features" features.


  • "The theater building" repeat the name here.


  • "in 1972. In 1980" repetitive.


  • "Colonial design" any decent link?


  • "Doric columns" likewise?


  • "builder" he built it?


  • "hipped roof, denticulated" what do both those mean?
  •  Done - Copy edited accordingly giving description. In the picture of the theater you can see the inverted "V" hipped roof. The teeth-like blocks underneath the decorative upper edge of the building are the dentil.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


  • "pedimented center" and that?


  • "portico Doric" what's portico? And link Doric first time.


  • "pillars which" that (to avoid repetitiveness).


  • "was in the class of the finest opera" how so?


  • "gridiron" what's that?


  • "fly galleries" and those?


  • "floor. [5]The" move the space to after the ref.


  • "by notable artists in their own right" do you mean "by artists notable in their own right"?


  • "who painted sets..." lots of "painted" in these sentences.


  • "gilded proscenium besides" overlinked.


  • "in 1882. In 1883" repetitive Perhaps "in 1882. The following year"


  • "Twenty-five more plays were performed in 1903 with a record 53 " 25/53 or Twenty-five/fifty-three.


  • "Western theatre Association of Chicago" small t?


  • "was terminated in" what was, the association or the lease?


  • "$25,000 from" inflate.


  • "Rotarians" link?


  • "movie theatre house" theatre or theater?


  • "out of date" hyphenate. But do you really just mean "old"?


  • "that ran first run movies" hyphenate "first-run".


  • "was licensed from the " I don't really understand this sentence.


  • "purchase the theatre and hall for $3,000 per year. This was to go over a twelve-year period. There" maybe merge, "purchase the theatre and hall for $3,000 per year over a twelve-year period. There"?


  • "Michigan State Troops" link?


  • "city would acquire"" would or did?


  • "of the space of the hall" of the hall or in the hall?


  • "its original heyday" POV issues.


  • "Managing Director" why caps?


  • "theatre and hall.[13][6] " theatre or theater? And order of refs.


  • "In this year he started" ugh, merge with previous short sentence.


  • "fund raising" hyphenate.


  • Don't think the historical marker text needs to be repeated, it's pretty clear to see.


  • Refs should be complete, i.e. publisher, date, access date, website etc.
Reminder: I'm taking this one on. Shearonink (talk) 19:00, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment: I'm not sure the Note I added is Wiki-kosher or "according to Hoyle" but I wanted any possible future readers to know that the National Archives actually has a pdf file of the Nomination & Acceptance forms available online for public view. Shearonink (talk) 21:57, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


  • "1902-1914" etc, year ranges, page ranges etc need en-dash not hyphen.


  • "Ramsdell Theatre - City of Manistee" spaced hyphen should be en-dash too.


  • It's not listed in the "U.S. National Register of Historic Places" navigation box so it shouldn't be there.
?? -- Am confused about this item. Per the National Archives the Ramsdell is listed on the National Register (see info below), so what exactly is missing that needs to be fixed?
  • Record Hierarchy
Record Group 79:
Records of the National Park Service, 1785 - 2006
Series: National Register of Historic Places and National Historic Landmarks Program Records, 2013 - 2017
File Unit: National Register of Historic Places and National Historic Landmarks Program Records: Michigan
Item: Michigan Single Properties Finding Aid, https://catalog.archives.gov/id/25337646 (Page 403)
Thanks, Shearonink (talk) 20:11, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
This article is not listed in the NRHP template at the bottom of the page. I didn't say it wasn't listed in the NRHP. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:14, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ah ok, clear as mud now. so the template should be {{National Register of Historic Places in Michigan}} then. Got it. Shearonink (talk) 20:34, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's it, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 12:12, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 4 needs filling out properly. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 15:00, 21 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@The Rambling Man: Ref 4 is covered by Ref 2 = fixed. Will that work.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:40, 21 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Doug Coldwell Sorry, I missed that correction/adjustment in that massive edit conflict I thought I had fixed. Sfn ref/Ref #4 looks perfect to me (Harvard refs can sometime be such a pain to get adjusted so they're correct... ) Shearonink (talk)

Okay, I made a few minor tweaks and deleted a sentence which I think was already covered. Feel free to revert. Otherwise, I'm satisfied this is good enough now. Nice work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:01, 21 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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