Talk:Rakta Sambandham/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Yashthepunisher (talk · contribs) 12:16, 30 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this soon, thanks. Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:16, 30 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Veera Narayana My apology for this late response. I will finish it right now. Yashthepunisher (talk) 19:48, 8 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead

I think the director should be mentioned first in the opening sentence and then the producers.

Done

"Radha falls in love with Raju's friend Anand, and they get married." Lose the oxford comma. Not consistent with others.

Done

Is their any info on the budget?

No. They said that it was produced on a restricted budget. No other reliable sources found.

"who praised the performances of the film's cast." I feel 'the film's' is unnecessary here.

Done

The word 'film' is mentioned twice in a single sentence in the third para.

Made amends accordingly.

Cast

The whole male female cast divide seems redundant.

Agreed. But both the film's credits and the songbook mention the listing in the same way. I did not know whom to prioritize over whom while making a singular list. Hence i went with the flow.

Production

Link Tamil and Telugu language in their first mention.

Done

"but were skeptical of the film's success, as it had a very tragic script." The word 'script' would have suited if the script had never materialised into a film. 'Story' would be a better choice of word here.

Makes more sense this way. Amended accordingly.

"Relangi and Girija were chosen to play Apparao and Sita." Add 'respectively' here.

Done

Music

"He was initially apprehensive about the songs as all of them were situation based, and that Viswanathan's music received critical acclaim." Forgive me, but who is Viswanathan here?

He is the music director of the Tamil original film. It was already mentioned in the "Cast and crew" section.

"penned the lyrics" is very idiomatic. Kindly rephrase.

Changed to collaborated.

Release, reception and legacy

"Rakta Sambandham made a great impact on the on-screen image of Rama Rao and Savitri." The word 'great' is very pov-ish and non-neutral.

Done changed to significant.

Thank you for your patience. Yashthepunisher (talk) 19:48, 8 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Veera Narayana Waiting for your response. Yashthepunisher (talk) 07:02, 27 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Yashthepunisher: Sorry. Was out of town for weeks, and hence could not notice this happening. I have worked on all the suggestions above. Feel free to suggest further which you feel necessary. Veera Narayana 04:52, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]