Talk:Raid at Ožbalt/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 06:40, 11 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 06:40, 11 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This bit seems redundant since we already know that they were rescued by Partisans. occupied Slovene territory escorted by Partisans, 99 POWs
- agree, have cut it.
The first two paragraphs of the background section should be combined as they both cover roughly the same subject. Not sure what to do about the 3rd para in the section as it's too short to exist on its own. It should be combined with another para, but I'm not sure exactly where to put it.
- I cut out redundancies and combined them all into one.
Why do we have soldiers' ID numbers?
- Old habits die hard I guess... no idea... deleted.
The REME were not the same as the Royal Engineers.
- The REME was not created until late 1942 (ie after Laws was captured). Several Corps had their own EME detachments until then. The 127th was definitely an RE unit.
Rework this sentence, the third clause would read better, IMO, as the second one. Churches had learned to speak passable German during his captivity, and when he resigned the role so he could be involved in the escape, had been the camp leader of the work camp for eighteen months.
- Done, let me know what you think?
You already told us his full name once, why are you doing so again? Private (later Sergeant) Ralph Frederick Churches
Are there any accounts from the Slovenes?
- They have published his account in Slovenian, but other than that I'm not aware of any. I've added a sentence about Churches and Laws visiting Slovenia and their reunions with their former Partisan comrades.
Pictures are OK--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 07:24, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- All addressed I think. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:59, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thanks for the review Sturm!