Talk:Radio Bart/GA1

GA Review

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Hello, I'll be reviewing the article to work with my GA sweeping project. See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for how I will execute this. Excellent work so far, but spotted a couple of issues. Let's begin. The Flash ^{talk} 19:46, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

Lead

• "To play a prank on the citizens of Springfield, Bart places a radio deep inside a well, using the microphone to trick the town into[...]" -> bit redundant, sort of like "To play a trick on them, he fools them to trick them." Reword please.
• "[...]of 14.1, and was[...]" -> "14.1 and was"
  •  Done

Plot

• "[...]radio systems, and instantly[...]" -> "systems and instantly"
• "[...]useless things like a cactus, a label maker, and a new suit." -> what kind of suit? Also, wikilink most of that, except cactus.
• "At the same time, "We're Sending Our Love Down The Well" dramatically falls off the number one spot to be replaced by "I Do Believe We're Naked" by Funky See, Funky Do." -> What? Is this actually a crucial part to the episode or is it just a joke, like "To the Steam Mill Workers of America - Keep on Reaching for that Rambo" in "Homer's Phobia" ?
  • This is necessary here because of a mention in the cultural references section.
• Wikilink Sting and explain who he is.
• "[...]Bart is finally rescued, and Willie puts[...]" -> "finally rescued and Willie"
  •  Done

Production

• Last sentence, first paragraph -> "He remarked, "<QUOTE>""
• "[...]song "We Are the World", that "We're Sending Our Love Down The Well" is based on" -> "We Are the World," which "We're Sending..." is based on"
• Once again, who's Sting? Please briefly describe him
• "[...]are invading Earth. Homer[...]" -> use a semi-colon in stead.
  •  Done

Cultural references

• ""We Are the World",[9][10][11] and the idea[...]" -> ""...the World" and the idea"
  • I think the comma is necessary here to separate the text.
• That whole Death of Diana foreshadowing can't be a cultural reference as it hadn't happened yet - maybe move it to Reception? Or Production?
  • I think it fits best in this section as it deals with culture.
  •  Done

Reception

• "[...]would win, and they[...]" -> "win and they"
• "[...]of the Las Vegas Sun,[16] and the third best[...]" -> "Vegas Sun and the"
• "[...]The Simpsons, and commented[...]" -> "Simpsons and commented"
  •  Done

Images

• Both images check out
  • Thanks again for reviewing! :) Theleftorium 11:25, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Final say

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   "Both commercials features a boy passing" -> "commercials feature"

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Just one issue and I'll pass it. Great job! :) The Flash ^{talk} 00:22, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Done! Theleftorium 09:14, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Great! I've gone ahead and passed it. The Flash ^{talk} 15:41, 16 August 2009 (UTC)