Talk:Racial segregation of churches in the United States/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Z1720 (talk · contribs) 00:57, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will be reviewing this GAN in the coming days. If you respond here, please ping me so I know to check this page. Thanks! Z1720 (talk) 00:57, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I am going to put this nomination on hold. Below are some parts that need to be fixed before I can pass this:

The lede has a short paragraph halfway through, which could be merged into the first or second paragraph.
"As of 2001, as many as 87% of Christian churches" Take out "as many as"
"Racially segregated churches have existed within the United States since before it became a country," Can you be more specific?
Why does the lede only mention African-American and white people? Can you also provide information about Indigenous, Asian and other ethnic groups?
In general, the lede should be expanded to become a summary of the article. Many key parts of the article are missing in the lede.
"There are many reasons for the history and continued prevalence of racial segregation in U.S. churches," Replace with "Racial segregation in U.S. churches happened and continue to exist because of..." This uses less words to explain the same idea.
"for community issues like civil rights, in addition to offering a respite" Replace "in addition to offering" with "and offer"
"Many of them felt " Delete "of them"
"New England" should be wikilinked.
"only qualified as "cultural inferiors", they were only expected to "subject themselves"" Per MOS:SCAREQUOTES Wikipedia tries to avoid putting things in scare quotes. Instead, define what these terms mean to these groups of people or reword them so you can remove the quotation marks.
Can the "Reconstruction" section be merged into one or two paragraphs, instead of three short ones?
"It was especially during this time that African Americans began forming their own churches," Delete "It was especially"
There's a big jump from 1870 to 1948. Can information be added to describe what was happening at this time?
"was some push from white" Replace "some push" with "an effort"
"However, many historians have said that religion was an important motivator for people to be in favor of civil rights, because they believed that racism was sinful or unchristian." Remove "However" and describe which historians say this.
The Black Hebrew Israelites section has one sentence about racial segregation about salvation. Do they have racial segregation in their services or other aspects?
"According to Cassandra L. Clark," who is this person?
In "Calvinism" the first paragraph explains what Calvinism is but this is offtopic as it does not talk about racial statistics or segregation. Same with Lutherism and Evangelicalism.
In the Catholicism section, delete "Racial Segregation in American Churches and Its Implications for School Vouchers"
You need to resolve the "Who" tag at the beginning of the "Organised communities" section.
The "Black Lives Matter" and "Racially targeted violence" sections are interesting, but I'm confused what this has to do with racial segregation in American churches

Overall, this is an interesting article that needs more focus on the topic of racial segregation. I'll pause the review there and let you resolve the above comments before continuing. Please ping me when this is finished. Z1720 (talk) 03:20, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The nominator has not responded to this review after multiple talk page notices, so I will consider this nomination abandoned and fail it. The nominator may bring this to GAN again once the above are addressed. Z1720 (talk) 16:15, 13 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]