Talk:Rabinder Singh (judge)/GA1

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Reviewer: Bencherlite ^Talk 15:00, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I am reviewing this, and see multiple problems at a glance. Bencherlite ^Talk 15:00, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

OK here we go, from the top:

Lead is "Rabinder Singh, QC (born 1964), styled as The Hon. Mr. Justice Singh, is a English barrister, founding member Matrix Chambers,Law Professor, Recorder in the Crown Court and High Court of Justice Judge." Problems: missing word (of Matrix Chambers); missing space between comma and next word; no need for capital letters in "Law Professor"; Recorder "in" the Crown Court is the wrong terminology; and he is not a High Court judge yet, so it shouldn't be phrased in the present tense.
The lead is also far too short to pass WP:LEAD.
Early life and education: very poor writing, and other problems...
1. "Britain" is a dablink (Fixed) --InExcelsisDeo (talk) 06:17, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
2. "attending Bristol Grammar School", instead of "attended" (Fixed) --InExcelsisDeo (talk) 06:17, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
3. "From an early age Singh had and interest in the law and he like the thought of one day becoming an advocate." Two glaring mistakes
4. "At Trinity Collge University of Cambridge" – should be "College", and preferably Trinity College, Cambridge (Fixed) --InExcelsisDeo (talk) 06:17, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
5. "how the law hold those in power to account" "– holds" (Fixed) --InExcelsisDeo (talk) 06:17, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
6. "called to the Bar(Lincolns Inn) in July 1989.[3] [2]" – should be a space after "Bar" and no space between the references. (Fixed) --InExcelsisDeo (talk) 06:17, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Career at the Bar - more on the same lines:
1. "From 1997-2002" – should be "From 1997 to 2002" (Fixed) --InExcelsisDeo (talk) 06:17, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
2. Much of the prose in the subsections "4-5 Gray's Inn Square", "Matrix Chambers" and "Professional reputation (as counsel)" is unsourced
3. And so is "Further cases", which shouldn't be in a collapsed box
4. Too many bullet points, not enough prose
High Court "exalted position" - NPOV?

I could go on, but the problems are too big to fix quickly. The article needs rewriting, as prose, and a proper copyedit before renomination. It's a quick-fail at this time. Bencherlite ^Talk 15:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]