Talk:Quincy Miller/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 13:38, 24 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
A few points:

When you first mention his sister's death, it might be good to explain briefly that she died in a car accident -- we don't learn what the deal was until the end of the article.
I moved the sister's death entirely to the personal section rather than the high school basketball section.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:53, 24 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

In the fourth paragraph of "High school career," the word "guys" is kind of slang-y. I'd say "young men" or "players".
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:53, 24 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
Plenty of refs, but is the citation to Twitter appropriate?
I have formatted the ref to formalize that these are the nicknames that he proclaims. Is that sufficient? Removable upon request.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:59, 24 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Fine with me. --Coemgenus (talk) 16:21, 24 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
No problems here.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
Seems NPOV to me.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
None.
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
None used, likely none available.
Overall:
Pass/Fail: