Talk:Putana/GA1

GA Review

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Hi! I will be reviewing this article for GA, and I should have the full review up within a couple of hours. Dana boomer (talk) 18:53, 7 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
The lead should be a summary of the entire article and should not have new information in it. Therefore, it should not need references.

Please combine or expand short paragraphs (those of one or two sentences).

Prose Issues:

In the lead, you say "symbolizing danger to an infant or aspiration respectively," I'm not sure what you mean by the aspiration part. Aspiration to what?

In the Legend section, you say "The fragrant smoke rose out of the flames, as Putana was cleansed of all sin by breast-feeding Krishna and she attained the same heaven, Yashoda acquires." So she was cleansed of her sin by breast-feeding? I thought this was her sin? And the same heaven as what? And where does the reference to Yashoda come in?

In the Symbolism subsection, you say "...infantile disease that Krishna survived and cured by forcefully suckling the child." This is confusing to me. Krishna survived it, but he himself cured it? And by forcefully suckling what child?

In the Textual descriptions section, you say "In another instance it is Putana and "her tribe" still had access to Krishna. Finally, the whole chapter is called "Deliverance of Putana", and not "Killing of Putana"." In another instance of what? What does Putana do? Also, what does the chapter name tell us? Is there a reason that this is important?
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
References should be arranged alphabetically by last name of the author, because your notes are given by the author's last name. This makes it easier for readers to find the exact text you are referencing.

If you are going to use the split reference format, with part of the information in the notes section and part in the references section, you need to do this consistently with all of the print materials, including those such as current refs #12, 17 and 22.

Book refs need to have publishers, publication dates, and isbn's or oclc's if available. World Cat is a big help for this. You may want to consider using the {{cite book}} template.

Using named refs is a good way to avoid having multiple notes going to the same book page. I would suggest doing this with refs such as the current refs #30, 32 and 35.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

There are a few issues with prose, and the references need some work, so I am putting this article on hold to allow you time to deal with the above concerns. If you have any questions, please drop me a note here on the review page or on my talk page. Dana boomer (talk) 19:42, 7 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, i am working on it. --Redtigerxyz (talk) 11:40, 8 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Reply to Comments: 1.

Sentences moved from lead
Done merging of paras
Prose issues:

replaced "aspiration" with "desire"
Amended sentence: "The fragrant smoke rose out of the flames, as Putana was cleansed of all sin by breast-feeding Krishna and she attained the same heaven that Yashoda acquired." So she was cleansed of her sin by breast-feeding? YES. So she was cleansed of her sin by breast-feeding? Trying to kill Krishna was one of the sins, being "killer of infants" was another. In Hindu myths, when a god kills a demon, he is generally depicted as forgiving the demon for his sins.
"Another theory interprets Putana as an infantile disease, which is cured by forcefully suckling the child, that Krishna survived."
"In another instance in the Purana, it is said that Putana and "her tribe" still had access to Krishna. Finally, the whole chapter is called "Deliverance of Putana", and not "Killing of Putana". Both incidences enforce the view that though Putana's mortal body is killed by Krishna, she lives on in the world as a spirit"--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:19, 8 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

2. Formatted the references. --Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:20, 8 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've done some more work on the references and made a couple of c/e tweaks, and I think the article is ready for GA status. Nice work, and thanks for the prompt response to my comments. Let me know if you have any questions. Dana boomer (talk) 18:49, 9 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]