Talk:Punggol MRT/LRT station/GA1
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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 09:21, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
This alien is reviewing this nomination. GeraldWL 09:21, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- In the hatnote, "on the North East line and Punggol LRT line" sounds redundant. Suggest removing that part.
- "By 2031, this station" --> "By 2031, the station".
- alt texts, will ya?
Images
[edit]- The multiple images template has the caption "NEL Platforms" and "LRT Platforms" then a footer explaining the same thing. I suggest removing the captions, then change the footer to "(Top to bottom) The NEL and LRT platforms." GeraldWL 14:54, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
North East line (NEL) and LRT
[edit]- "Plans and studies were made since 1984 for a possible north-east line serving from Outram Park to Punggol via Dhoby Ghaut." Supported by four citations, which looks like overkill to me. Is this appropriate? If one or two sources are enough to support this sentence, then just use the two sources. GeraldWL 09:21, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
- "In March 1996, when the 16 NEL stations were revealed, Punggol was confirmed to be the northern terminus of the line." Prefer using semicolon (;) rather than comma (,).
- "During the 1996 National Day Rally Speech by then prime minister Goh Chok Tong, he announced that the station will serve the upcoming Punggol 21 development." --> "During the 1996 National Day Rally Speech, the then prime minister Goh Chok Tong announced that the station will serve the upcoming Punggol 21 development."
- "The staff encountered a few cobras during the station's construction" --> 'cobra' sounds like a slang. Suggest changing to "obstacles", "impediment", or anything synonymous.
- Just to pop in here but I think the cobra used in the sentence refers to the actual snake rather than an obstacle. Pentagon 2057 (T/C) 06:16, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
- Theeen "cobra" should prob be linked. GeraldWL 06:21, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
Incidents
[edit]- "Investigations later revealed that a broken contact wire affected the power source to trains launching from Sengkang Depot, causing the service disruptions." Is there a reason why a whopping 5 citations are cited?
Station details
[edit]- "The station will be extended one stop to Punggol Coast station in 2024." Too many citations.
- "Designed by two architectural firms – 3HP architects and Farrells"-- is "architects" capitalized or no?
- "The glass paintings represents elements of water, the seaside, kampongs"-- you will have to clarify what kampong is, as readers won't probably be Malay or Indonesian.
- "In this work"-- prefer "In the work".
- Paragraph 2 of "Public artwork" uses citation 44 repeatedly. Just remove the first two citations; the last one will cover it all.
- Similar to Paragraph 3 and 4.
- "This was the first time the artist used glass as a medium." Using the term the artist will make it sound like it's an anonymous artist or something. I prefer referring him as Goh, not the artist; it makes the article more humanly.
- "...he hoped the work will make them "think of the sea" and their "younger days"." I believe everyone knows what he's referring to by "younger days". Suggest paraphrase that to youth or something similar. GeraldWL 14:52, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
- ZKang123, mind addressing these comments? Or have you addressed them all? GeraldWL 17:47, 30 January 2021 (UTC)
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