Talk:Pubal/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:41, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"circa[a] 24 July 2005) " no need for that footnote to be inserted there in the lead. Either put it in the infobox or just explain it in the article.
No need for references in lead when everything there should be covered (in more detail) in the main part of the article, so the refs can go there.
" his continuous escapes " not continuous, numerous perhaps.
"his entire life" entire isn't needed.
I think the Name section can be integrated into the History section after the discussion over his discovery. Otherwise it disrupts the chronology.
"any name as names " is repetitive.
"On the 26th of July, 2005," -> "On 26 July 2005,"
" charcoal burning workers" why not just "charcoal burners"?
" a devastating flood" POV, just "a flood" and perhaps describe objectively what damage that flood did.
"His age was said to be no more than two days " -> "He was said to be no more than two days old..."
"leftovers" is an odd way of putting it, remnants perhaps?
"with his wife " and his wife.
"milk through a" milk with a
"but it was not long before he lost interest in representatives" ->" but he soon lost interest in rejoining"?
"at one point literally interrupting " no need for literally.
"completely tame.[9][7]" ref order.
"carefully orchestrated in a way that could " -> "managed to"
"vicinity Pubal was relatively quickly seen on his own again and trying to find humans"-> "vicinity, Pubal was relatively quickly seen on his own again, trying to find humans"
"to start finding his own sources of food that were not reliant on humans." no need for "that were not reliant on humans".
"250 kilograms" convert to pounds.
"he might end up hurting someone when frightened" -> "he could harm someone"
"for good." permanently.
" has passed away" died.
" the same documentary received " it received. And what accolades?

That's all I have. I can't check any of the references however, so I've asked for a second opinion on those Polish language sources. On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:52, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Samotny Wędrowiec I'll close the review on 30 April if we don't make progress. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:38, 27 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man, thank you for the review. I've now made all the suggested changes. Cheers! --Samotny Wędrowiec (talk) 20:30, 28 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I've spot-checked some of the online refs via Google Translate and I'm happy to AGF that the rest are fine, so I'm promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 07:51, 30 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]